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Old 08-02-2013, 06:51 PM   #8
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oats, dynamic flow that expanded over the course of the verse was the framework for an easy read, packed with some memorable content that also aided to verse. Said a lot for how brief this was. My favourite line:

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now a hedge fund manager, no longer seen as a piece of meat
just the peace she meets at home knowing that she’ll never need to cheat
Mr. J, interested format for the verse. While intentionally withholding vital parts of information, you slowly described an occurrence to which the reader was unaware, you kept me entertained and the ending provided the relieving solution

Prognosis, excellent battle to read, was nice and short and both writers made up for the length with their content. Was a close one but I enjoyed oats verse a bit more here as it left a more memorable impression

+1 oats
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