Chea, this is what I’m talking about!
First off LOL @ mentioning the Silk Road, it reminded me of the drug website found via Tor for my drug paraphernalia heads who know what I mean haha! I also don’t agree with what Serpent said regarding the rhymes being ‘basic’, far from it actually, I’m a huge fan of multi-strings and think as a technical aspect, when used correctly, they really help the mechanics of a verse – and sometimes flow - depending on their usage and rhyme placement. It’s a really underrated skill, and one most of us can do, but not everyone can do well. That’s the difference for me. Mike Wrecka is actually pretty dope with it, despite our earlier back and forth trollscapades, the homie definitely knows what he’s doing on this turf and always goes hard. This was no exception. The flow in the opening four was dope, felt some of the lines gradually got longer in length and syllable count as he went on, fluctuating towards the middle and end, but never to the point it was detrimental. I thought he stuck to the topic ferociously, knew how he wanted to approach this and tackled it really well. Very polished verse, drive to his writers voice which moved the piece along at pace and made what wasn’t a short read feel as though it was anyway due to this. I’m impressed. I’ve read many pieces by this guy in the past, so I can’t say I’m surprised, but dudes a problem and he showed that here. Great showing IMHO.
TopicalDood5: Wack name, great lyricist - Simply put haha! The imagery from the jump of this piece showed where his strengths lie, loved the “oak-stained porch” visual to start, really helped build that mental picture of the scene he was conveying and I got this image of something from the Stepford Wives with the white-picket fence, freshly mowed lawn and so forth. The five cylinders fire like live dillingers was dope wording also, liked the switch in scheme also there, it caught me off guard – but it works for the purpose it was used in. The contrast between the light of the millionaire-esque lifestyle and the dark being allured to in that opening stanza made it really impressive too, always liked that juxtaposition between the dark and the light. Great idea.
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Lovely sodomy festers behind the pastoral houses and lawns
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I’m typing as I read back through here, but I think that line I quoted shows more so what I meant with what I had just said from his verse haha! TopicalDood5 did meet the requirements of the task, by mentioning Khazar’s towards the end of his third stanza – so really Serpent’s comment is void here, but I do agree that he met it by a margin whereas Mike Wrecka tended to really go the whole hog and presented a verse based in facts on a well-rehearsed topic. This could be one of those that comes down to personal preference, I guess in this case I agree, but I do feel like Mike wrote more directly with the topic in mind whereas TopicalDood5 only alluded to it and tied it in with a more all-encompassing story, which he’s entitled to do, it’s just that if he loses this because of it he shouldn’t feel too disheartened. TD5 is crew so he knows I’m not a hater, just a straight up dude, and overall I preferred Mike’s verse in terms of his execution of the topic as a whole.
Looking forward to facing you both. :D