FIRST OFF the editing is bad...couldn't differentiate between the verses.i thought they all belonged to lars and was expecting to see what ya colleagues wrote until i saw the feeds.
But you know what?, My not being able to differentiate the verses goes to prove that you three blended in so well i didn't notice there was a transition!!!
Flow was cool, and from the feeds i saw, seems like yall quickly scribbled this down. So......i would omit criticising yall spelling errors, but you guys might try proof reading next time so as not to mislead your reader about the particular choice of words. Everyone make mistakes too.
Some of mine are that my thoughts are faster than my fingers making me miss some words when typing thinking i have them typed already.(lol) "repetition" and misplacement of letters like someone did^
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Originally Posted by Lars
Each page represents progression, sessions and hours wasted,
I hate to admit that sometimes feedback feels like sour hatred.
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#word
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But when I do I want the feedback to match not ones opinon that all you sheep rally
around and pretend like the echo your creating is actually your own unique sound.
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#Thoughtful and poetic!
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most you can do is tear my peice to the ground
or did i astound but dont just copy two lines that you found and say this is my favourite.
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My Favourite:D hehehe...
ALL IN ALL nice combination of pro skills. Thought provoking(thats for anyone that wants to read btw the lines.) Dunno if i can come up with this kind of ish in few mins.
#thumbs up!!!