Objective - I liked ur approach..I would have like to see a little more male chauvinism, but thats me. Flow wise it read well, however content wise i feel like u could have done more. For example, u kinda cheaped out with ur analogy to hit hard (u could have foreshadowed or something) rahter than going with economy, which didn't relate to any of this. However I did enjoy the male movement/chicks took the liquor line and the facebook ties. I just felt it was wrote in too passive of a tone for an active verse...like i felt U needed to use better verbs, and show more emotion in ur character in my opinion, bc ur character is emotionally driven by hate/dislike...which are strong emotions, so i feel the words you would use should have been stronger. Not a bad verse though.
Boredom - Very similiar approach. Your scheming was a little more effective to me, but i disliked ur refrain, it felt unneeded to me. You also took a more passive approach with a self-rant and described more than doing. I feel ur passive voice and use of a refrain my have actually hurt ur piece. Moreover, the way u ended it (even emphasised by ur final refrain) kinda left me like um... because there was no real solution to me. I did enjoy all ur internet references, and I feel the flow was solid.
Alright, first off let me say I vote per a read, like i read objectives then addressed it and then boredom and did the same. The fact that both used the same kinda approach kinda hurt the whole match imo, would have liked to see 2 diff approached but hat can you do. I gotta edge this to objective though, bc i felt his flow held close to boredoms, and although boredom schemes were better, objectives verse was more active, and complete.
Vote - Objective
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