Gazette - The verse was pretty good. I enjoyed how u gave ur characters a personality, and brought them to life. However, I did feel sometimes that it was over the top. Also, I wasn't crazy how u executed some of ur scheming, and at times the rhymes were almost to imperfect, and would have been better suited if u just didn't rhyme in those certain places. Story wise, logically it flowed well, but also seemed a little to excessive..like some parts were just unneeded and superfluous (like the whole whiskers thing) At other times tho ur over the top word choice played well into ur characters personality and worked well with it. I do wish u kinda ended stronger tho.
Pent - Dope verse. Read real clean. Ur character deff had some personality, and it was amusing. Flowed real smooth. This was actually a change from what Ive read of u in the past (and i may be generalizing, but im speaking from what ive read,) but it wasn't full of vocab and mutli's, but rather more character oriented, and u excelled at it. Im not saying that it didnt have mutlis or sht, but it wasn't driving to that effect. Ur character amused me, and the tone i got from it seemed to fit perfectly with what I would envision as a frotteurist, even down to the analogies. Dope verse.
Vote - Pent
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