Originally Posted by Objective
Patient (Objective):
It's getting harder to manage,
and emotions got an unfair advantage.
If I'm failing my subconscious planned it,
an ocean-like view, yet I'm broken and stranded.
Humanitys doom is bottled and branded,
too many beers have left me awefully candid.
No secrets exposed except those society demanded,
there's times my mind contracted, then suddenly expanded.
----- Loving all of this, some of it a bit sloppy as far as the multiple syllables and what not but a far as the content and it being felt its all there
And life hits me with second hand emotional pain..
So much for being a friend, to me there's nothing to gain.
I'm nothing but plain, relationships focused on conscious mistakes,
which created this two-sided monster who's rotting away.
---- again feeling this imagery you put together very nice
Existence itself is too much to grasp, not just cuz I aint a clue,
but it's too hard to get anything else than a third person view.
I'm the center of my universe, and you are of yours too,
the big bang that created it all is perverted, so what does it do?
Personalities, who? Morals is a flawed idea, just like reality,
I can't stand being a part of this scrutinized noise known as humanity.
----- okay I gotta say I'm feeling this concept Forreal and the third person line was heavy my man, and a strong finish to ay the least ... Great work
Therapist (Veritas):
The existential is fundamental to the growth of your psyche,
Yet wholly inconsequential provided that you trust and like me.
For the man that is truly authentic with his therapist,
Is the man that can be guided away from the pitfall most perilous.
----- okay cool start def like where it's headed
Understand that the words you gave your feelings are indeed accurate,
Now please understand that I exist to help you succeed and master it.
Your feelings of inadequacy are prominent, you flirt with nihilism
But negative patterns of emotions can’t stand before realism.
The key to vision is what frees from prison,,,,,now heed this wisdom:
----- Loving this great job, put together perfect IMO wording was as good as it gets here
Still there? Great.
I don’t want to lose you
I promise I care, and will educate,
And I swear I will never confuse you.
I have heard your words, I have discerned your symptomology
I have a few concerns, first that you wish life would give u an apology
Second that you feel disconnected from life,
You feel misunderstood, mistreated, and stricken with strife
But as your therapist I have the beginning of the answers you seek…..
humanity aint the problem, it is our thinking that our problems are unique.
----- okay not the strongest finish but def enjoyed it, just feel it may have lacked a bit or maybe could've continued a bit? Reguardless this was a great drop from both
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