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Old 08-01-2013, 07:20 AM   #7
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this one i actually like bette rhten the other one

i think the scheme is what sets it off, it come off to me as a poetry jam type piece, or an openmic poetry piece where the artists gets into it and emphasises the last couple words of each rhyme part loudly u know like itd be


The walls are bubbling. Water damage,
it could all come tumbling down.

But before I can stall my stumbling,
I fall. The bumbling clown---finds his first laugh.
The mindless words snap with ease,



like finds his first laugh would be said lower then bumbling clown rofl but yeah the scheme was cool here

hate how u used church twice in such a small section but still cool

better then ok cupid
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