Rawn M.D.

lol, i enjoyed this
first 4 lines scheme was real smooth. I also appreciate the progression of the rhymes movie/moving
then u throw a nice little word affiliation in there with blue/deep/hook
after that the scheme deviated a bit more, and threw me for a second bc of the drastic change in assonance, but the flow remained constant
after that u kinda went a bit more comedic, but with like a half-jest (soaked in man-sweat)
i wasn't crazy with the 'on here' repetition, but i get what u were saying/doing
but although the tone changed a bit for me, the flow was fluent, an the way u ended it brought it together nicely.

I also (u do this in other pieces as well) enjoyed the way u play with the scheming using internal rhymes n assonance, (skipping an end rhyme) its a bit unorthodox, but you execute it nicely, and it also allows for emphasis on the following rhymes (At least the way i read it.)

I liked this though.