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You should delete your own posts in this thread other than the verse, so that it doesn't appear to have so many replies.

With that said, I liked this a lot better than the other verse I just left feedback on. The rhymes and content were much more linear and focused here, as though you sat down with a purpose. There was a natural tone. A lot of people hate the interjections ("Yeah," etc.), but they gave me a better sense of how the flow worked and kept in tone with the writing.

With that said, the content and a lot of the writing was cliché. It's true that no idea's original, but there still remains to be said something about searching for it. I think a big part of it is that it never really felt personal or important to you. It seemed as though you wanted to repeat the images you've heard already.