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A thought, gentlemen: The number of superfluous posts in this thread made me think it already had received plenty of votes. I only even opened it to see if this was a repost of the Writing Challenge League battle.

Coup: Your style is not very fluid. Each of your lines reads as though it was written in a vacuum, then fit with another line ending on the same rhyme. More carry-over in both rhymes and content between lines would really make these verses easier to read. With that said, the piece itself was an interesting spin through a very direct approach on the topic. The second-person approach doesn't really work here because it prevents any real character development and loses some of the emotional impact you were targeting. Moreover, I know that the things you're saying I am feeling are not actually things I am feeling. Third-person or first-person narratives work better because the reader can't simply say, "No, I'm not."

PancakeBrah: I nodded throughout your verse. I'm very opposed to those who truly believe they are special and will be the ones to make differences in the world. The verse was redundant, and the writing wasn't your tightest. But the content was so relatable, and several of the lines were brilliant. This was my favorite: "life is being twenty seven and going to Wal-Mart, for the one hundred fortieth time."

Vote: PancakeBrah