First off FUCK YOU for making me re-read this because of the outstanding use of vocabulary lol...ok now
when nothing remains, unhinge the projector, at the back of your brain-
voila- nothing remains! inject a syringe in a vignette's coagulate veins.
coddle the past and yet nothing remains, rosy ashes in a vase or a vase.
Loved this section...Imagery was definitely felt here, flow is smooth and was particular to the part quoted
taught to believe ancestral wisdom, go pray in the ablative case,
phrased a kid and his horse:
"breathe in the corpse- death's but an axiom away".
This was my favorite segment! weirdly constructed but yet it came across perfect. Definetly haven't seen anything written this way(though I don't read OM's much)..
Overall this was a solid piece. Strong points I would say are imagery and the flow of the piece...downfall maybe tooo much vocabulary? for me anyways, but a nice piece regardless
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