good wording, good alliteration(sp) to establish the mood, I felt it...
Props on using the rose metaphor in a few ways, to describe your condition and relations and how it serves as a metaphor for your general well being both past and present, and like how a rose grows and like how it reacts to the elements, so do you. nice concept...lots of good lines
Quote:
Still Remember the night u gave me your sweater
Genuine gestures began to relieve the pressures
Of wearin a mask to please my other half
Wish I kept it on and gave the flower back
Now I can't move on the sweaters on the rack
Glass heart shattered when I fell for you
Can't believe I really felt for you..
Really dealt with you...
Not regretful cuz what's done is done
Now I got another rose hope it gets some sun
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^incredible detail...stark images. props