cause it was you, i wasnt expecting much...but i actually liked parts of this, some lines i didnt like...
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Making the complex simple is the true mark of genius
A smile on ya chicks lips is a clue they harped on my penis
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second line just doesnt do the first line justice for me, but considering the title, maybe you're aim was to produce this type of vibe? wdeva
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but in the real world you are a miserable sinner inside and out ya house
join the club buddy, my souls’ muddy and ancient, loving and patient
my spacious spaceship is vacant, terrestrial faces are racist and wasted
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same problem, but rather than an injustice, i feel the contrivance (imo) of wording on the third line just take away from the other two, but shit that also means i liked the first two lines
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See I stepped my game up while you kats chose the escalator
If your life is a stage, then just consider VERITAS the audience,
but we can still play compare chains just to see whose are the gaudiest
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that shit just comes off nice, aint gonna put it any other way
blah
on the whole, i'll just say i didnt mind reading this...take it how you want
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