Veritas: Some weird lines there, interesting and creative enough to keep the enjoyability up. Thought it was cool enough overall.
Otpeks: Kinda basic ish, straight forward kinda forgettable stuff for a verse. Keep writing and read some of the better peoples verses for inspiration and to see the difference between great and not so great, might help ya improve.
Vote: Veritas.
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I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave,
So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave.
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