Gaz--- At first glance...I was blown away by the sheer vocab ability to pocket L's and N's. The act was really nice but the repetitive nature of it left the substance of the piece lacking. It read almost desperate in the fashion that you had to keep going with the LN scheme theme. You kinda sacrificed alot to pull it off.
""Look No further than this - are you not brave? Then you must make the darkest vow"
"In Lucifers Name" - imbued with a shame so wretched, my stomach felt like Lava Now"'
^^See how even this simple piece lacks in emotion or solid imagery.
Other than that , I did however enjoy seeing you put on that display of vocab mastery.
Cert---Loved the bold topic. I too...enjoyed the second half better than the first. Only because...I felt you could have brought us directly in far more quickly and had room to play with the emotion and vivid imagery. Still you pulled it off....I liked the chorus in between. Maybe one too many but still that set belonged to the piece as a whole.I liked the civil war approach instead of the civil rights approach. It gave a fresher insight. Plus I liked the tone...wasn't any "Angry Blackman out for revenge on Whitey"....but yet a glimpse into the way it was with all either accepting that its a part of history or not ........either way , History cannot be changed. But we can all draw our own conclusions and learn from it.
V/Certain
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