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While vampires have oversaturated our culture, the justifications here were interesting, particularly in the form of rap. There was a steady stream of multiple-syllable rhymes, some forced but generally OK. I would have liked more sharply described imagery. It seems as though you were keeping to the edges throughout the entire piece, as though you were trying to keep a pretty obvious central topic hidden. There's a fine line between subtlety and vagueness, though, and it's particularly important when you're approaching a specific topic.