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There were a few exceptional sections in this, particularly in the lyricism. The part that at least two people above me quoted from Darth Yoda's verse was his best section. From Zombie, I enjoyed the beginning, up through about "instead of writing me off."

Both verses became more scattershot as they continued. This was frustrating because there were good thoughts on society and perception in Zombie's lead and great wordplay in Darth Yoda's better sections. But most of us, myself included, are guilty of going off stream of consciousness more often than the art would recommend.

You're obviously both talented. That also means you're capable of better, more focused writing. But this was a very enjoyable read.