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Old 07-20-2013, 05:23 AM   #2
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The flow doesn't really work as rap. Some lines are much longer than others, and there wasn't much complexity in the rhyme scheme.

Some of the wording was strong. I particularly liked the bit about makeup.

The content itself was a bit rehashed. The Eve section didn't make complete sense to me. She did blame the devil, according to the story, but that was kind of the reason for the punishment.
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