Paper Chase ft. Rawn
 

Paper chase

Shogun

For this hopeless check? I hold my breath till my face is pale...
While im unaware, u see Sho cut from the air without a Dave Chapelle...
Driving myself crazy, although the signs say I'm well...
but If the love for money is the route of all evil than I'm on the highway to hell...
Known as jason bourne just fighting to escape the storm...
Burning trees to a third degree - no wonder im chasing more and my paper gone...
Red white and blue, might confuse what type of war you might explore...
Nowadays its the color green that some it seems is all your fighting for...
I'm twice as poor as I was the night before, with no steady income...
No matter how much u try to change or find a way its already been done...
Spending time to spend money, till ur life is spent...
So just accept, and hope that in death you get to live a life again...

Rawn -

The games over when we out for that payola
beatin on ya bitch till my bed’s spring break like Daytona
with an eighth rolled up, on a hunt for those ends
black card, senior discount the way we dish out hundred n tens
with a love to just spend, till our pockets light
bitches stop on site, need a Zamboni machine to even rock my ice
my lodge is nice, ride on nothing but yachts n bikes
high speed, fast life; learn from my misfortune but forgot its price
get that VIP treatment wherever we be at
feet up with the seat back eating gourmet fileted chilien sea bass
we be that; money motivated for the payment
because the grass is always greener for the team that turns the rake in

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http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=9530

Pretty dope lines, Y'all complimented each others style pretty well, but I think both of you kind of fell off a little on the end, not to say it wasn't still dope, but was hoping for more BANG at the end :-D

Not bad at all though, good solid rhyme style, good flow... nice imagery... props to both y'all

I didn't really think the verses went together. Shogun Dinero's verse was about searching for something meaningful. It didn't always connect, but there were a few good thoughts in it. Your wording definitely needs to be tightened up a bit to make your wordplay more effective.

Rawn M.D.'s verse was swag and flow, and it was good at that. Is this the second verse of yours I've read with a mention of Chilean sea bass? The spring break line was good.

Both of you write like you're battling, with the short setup carrying all the weight for the flow before a longer punchline that often wasn't a punchline at all.

@Certain Serpent

in my PM post i didnt mention sea bass, but lots of other foods/fish = /

No need for back to back bumps tbh.

thanks for the feeed, much appreciated.

Gamblini, cool verse. You opened up with a solid first bar, then from there had some chill statements. The ending line was needlessly depressing, IMO.

Known as jason bourne just fighting to escape the storm...
Burning trees to a third degree - no wonder im chasing more and my paper gone...
^felt this.

Rawnaldo, lol @ your entirely different direction than Gamble. It was alright but overall these two small keystyles lacked chemistry.

my lodge is nice, ride on nothing but yachts n bikes
high speed, fast life; learn from my misfortune but forgot its price
^that was neat.

Cool collab.

Feed?

uP

I don't think anyone wants to feed this guys, for whatever reason.