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Mercy 09-26-2014 03:35 PM

The Beauty of The Crow
 
The character of a crow is a harrier to the most
It's scarier for it's terror and very stern in it's prose
The evil in it's eyes seem feeble through it's disguise
It's equal to an eagle, though lethal throughout it's mind
It's soul shadowed by darkness.. cold, shallowed and artless
It's heart sparks the harshness where it marks its' target
A heartless being seeking a harmless carcass
It leaps far aches just to carve n' harvest
Poised in position with the choice of it's victim...
It's vindictive and depicted with no remorse for inflictions
Soaring miles through the clouds, forcing child's into shrouds
Morbid, wild and profound is the style of this hound
A living mystery... giving misery upon the innocent
We've witnessed it's wicked imagery, given it's difference
It's lives for bloodlust, you must run when it's choosing who's disposed
But it's just the ugly truth about the beauty of the crow...

Kin 09-26-2014 04:02 PM

I will feed this when I see you hittin up other posts in here with comments...otherwise u gonna find out they dont play that here

Mercy 09-26-2014 04:06 PM

I ain't "playin'" nothing. I'm simply posting my shit. I'll comment when I get around to it. so don't freepost on my pieces if you ain't got feed, that's a waste of my time. I'll feed when I get a chance.

Kin 09-26-2014 04:21 PM

best lines to me

Poised in position with the choice of it's victim...
It's vindictive and depicted with no remorse for inflictions

overall much better read then ya other drop...this was more wit' it as far as rhyme schemes an content...pretty solid...

HoLLa

Mercy 09-26-2014 04:24 PM

thanks for the feed. respect

big baby 09-26-2014 10:38 PM

seemed a little loose and choppy in some ends. picked up in a few lines. the cohesion was cool. seemed like a younger version of you wrote some lines and then a more experienced version wrote the other lines. seemed weird reading at times.


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