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veritas 09-08-2014 05:46 PM

Life is like charlie brown's shirt
 
Life is like Charlie brown’s shirt

Cephlocaudal development in humans,
Because problems are never problem’s solutions
Colossal impediments, the nuisance,
Of loving what kills you, like Golem’s confusions.
A circle, a ring, causality, a priori,
Resourceful is the king, no fallacy, amore.
The presupposed suppository,
The emperor’s new clothes are boring.
It’s raining, it’s pouring, and the old man is snoring
Shall we gently shake him to wake him?
…shakes the old man….
“Damn kids! I was dreaming of when I used to be king!
Long before I gave a damn about anything
Like rent or bills, thrills, or credit/debit
Or whats happening to the fappening on reddit
And you can bet it’s the downfall of your entire plot
That your names get brought up and tossed in the lot.”
“what about the forests?” , you ask the old man…..
“there are no answers, only choices, and do you even understand?”
Crickets, jiminy, silent yet livid with violent imagery
Of ISIS specifically. Our minds are confined like King’s misery
Then all of a sudden it happens!

The valley is gone! The valley is gone! The weak are now strong!
The beef has thawed, the sleep is gone, and the deep aint wrong!
And as you rise up from your watery tomb, you understand and finally see….
That the red baron is just a dog in a place he shouldn’t be
So you let your imagination run wild until it exhausts all its options
Then your right back where you started, wack and full of toxins.

Sho Money EMG 09-08-2014 06:00 PM

Lol. this was real good. It was intriguing to read and entertaining. I love the whole "not what you think" concept you stuck with and referenced some great logic.

The valley is gone! The valley is gone! The weak are now strong!
The beef has thawed, the sleep is gone, and the deep aint wrong!
And as you rise up from your watery tomb, you understand and finally see….
That the red baron is just a dog in a place he shouldn’t be
So you let your imagination run wild until it exhausts all its options
Then your right back where you started, wack and full of toxins.

Loved this part.

Cephlocaudal development in humans,
Because problems are never problem’s solutions
Colossal impediments, the nuisance,
Of loving what kills you, like Golem’s confusions.
A circle, a ring, causality, a priori,
Resourceful is the king, no fallacy, amore.
The presupposed suppository,
The emperor’s new clothes are boring.
It’s raining, it’s pouring, and the old man is snoring

Loved the vocabulary. Gotta admit some of the words I had to lookup cause I had no idea at first lol. Wonderful stuff tho. Good read V.

Ghost1 09-08-2014 09:03 PM

"Just cuz u dont understand him dont mean that hes nice"

Sho Money EMG 09-08-2014 09:12 PM

I know this @Bags

Leave me alone bro, I'm not bothering u.

Btw I looked up the words I didn't understand.

veritas 09-09-2014 09:05 AM

leave him alone bags.

oats 09-09-2014 09:09 AM

Ego

veritas 09-09-2014 09:13 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oats (Post 399102)
Ego

CONSIDER....

why you said this to me, here, of all places? I know the answer, doest thou? Use your imagination, and then lose it again to rational thought, and then repeat the cycle. Let Snoopy fly bro. He aint hurting you. I once concevied of a world where men where able to choose how they died, none chose for others. Do you understand?

oats 09-09-2014 09:31 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oats (Post 399102)
Ego


veritas 09-09-2014 09:50 AM

Oats....tell me about the first time you loved and then lost love and the lessons you learned.

Ghost1 09-09-2014 06:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Gamble (Post 398809)
I know this @Bags

Leave me alone bro, I'm not bothering u.

Btw I looked up the words I didn't understand.

Lol shut up pussy. Ill p7nch ur life apart.

Sho Money EMG 09-09-2014 10:26 PM

Yeah right faggot

PancakeBrah 09-09-2014 10:32 PM

I liked

"Because problems are never problem’s solutions
Colossal impediments, the nuisance,
Of loving what kills you, like Golem’s confusions.
A circle, a ring, causality, a priori,
Resourceful is the king, no fallacy, amore.
[Redacted]
The emperor’s new clothes are boring."

"“there are no answers, only choices, and do you even understand?”"

"And as you rise up from your watery tomb, you understand and finally see….
That the red baron is just a dog in a place he shouldn’t be"

and strongly disliked the rest.

Like in terms of my personal assessment of you as an Open Mic writer. I thought the quoted sections where better than my preconceptions of you. The rest fit right into them.

Keep that quill metriculatin'!


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