The hunger that leads me
 

Who are we? I wish u could prove to me what I use to be
Its truth I seek, while we continue to leach off their purity
The blood is nudity; they can't bear to look, stares mistook
Regardless of the glamour you've been declared a crook
unfair to put... u in the discussion with Martyrs for starters
u don't want to spare the goods while it gets harder & harder
the darker the charmer it becomes a losing battle for us
we can't survive without their existence... the sample of lust
u traveled a Dutch, incorporated the natives with races
u originated the basics... bodies infiltrated with chases
sunshine decimated with traces of your tasteless relations
the pass of time erased it & faded the mark of the dark
aged with the senses of a shark but yet smart, heart of a stark
cold as the soul of the dead, devil worshippers spread
born again yet supporting this pledge; no warning, on edge
the thirst conversed with my instincts in sync with killers
linked with these drinkers where infants bring thriller
no limits considered, losing my faith confused by the trait
choosing my bait as abusive as hate introduced by my mate
can't move no escape; pain in the neck tamed by respect
feeling no shame nor regret, so in vain we connect
I wasn't drained by the peck, I was the lucky chosen
saw my flashing past faulty, broken... bloody soakin'
my body frozen... replaced by memories of past centuries
death calls & without one word her wrath mentors me
satisfying my eternal needs... to explore a future at night
...continuing an undying legacy all due to this bite

I don't topical so feed from me is pointless.

I read it though, enjoyed.

Good stuff pops.

aha on some twilight shit.

but tbh this was a dope read, everything flowed nicely, imagery was pretty on point, vocab was up and all in all i liked the subtly somewhat hidden idea behind the piece.

should get at a collab G, keep up the writing.

Up like clouds

lol the fuck did u write this for

While vampires have oversaturated our culture, the justifications here were interesting, particularly in the form of rap. There was a steady stream of multiple-syllable rhymes, some forced but generally OK. I would have liked more sharply described imagery. It seems as though you were keeping to the edges throughout the entire piece, as though you were trying to keep a pretty obvious central topic hidden. There's a fine line between subtlety and vagueness, though, and it's particularly important when you're approaching a specific topic.

@Certain Serpent

Props for feeding as of late


And nika this be dope man fluid read nothing really over thought or over schemes. It was just the right amount forth and sometimes it would slip but you stayed intact with your message and yes it was vague but I perceived it enough to image me the picture he was trying to paint with very precise execution. Props on this nika a good read from you. It's been a while

this was pretty dope man i didnt get a twilight vibe from it, twilight made vampires gay, but vampires used to be g back when bram stoker wrote about em or anne rice. anyways this dope man the flow was on point the content was g props

Thought it was great as fuck with a fluent flow and lots of multis along with a rich language that truly exposed writing of high caliber. Thought the theme was cool, not to be THAT guy, but personally werewolves are doper imho. But yeah, vampires are pretty badass creatures too if we look past the bullshit that's launched at us nowdays.

Keep posting solid shit. Pz.