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Gamble vs. Notebook [gamble wins]

I don't budge when old fucks push my patience, eyes low and seethin'
You're mentally weak and lack energy, kid. So as hard as you try, you can't move me like failed Psychokinesis
A stale pile of feces is more "The Shit" than you'll ever be
NOBODY FEELS YOU, and it's CLEARLY not because we lack empathy...
Your efforts are never seen as effective with lines parallel to these
And from the Right Angle, Not Even Hypothetically
Don't need a Long Thread to prove he's Bitch-Made, so this punk stays nervous
Cross Dressin' like Christian Women at Sunday Service
Lift your skirt, and I see that you ain't from the hard-knocks
If you've ever seen Sham Rock, it was probably in your Lucky Charms Box
Get laid Face Flat on the Ground for exuding some ruthlessness
Put your Up-Side Down like Odd Future did to the Crucifix
I'm the God of this rap shit. Your crew gets throttled for breaking my sole commandments
If you Gruesome Intellect, you'd be Smart Enough to not follow your Man's Sin / Manson
But, copycats reenact mistakes... So, it's best to Zip It Up before you catch the Body-Bag treatment fast;
Free At Last! Like Martin Luther's speech "I Have A Dream" before the heater-blast...

This homos whack... I'll merk em in seconds, once I choke this fag?
Ill Carry Note across the Bridge before The Drop like I was harmonizing in Vocal Class.
I sever this fag, once I step on a track I'm sending him fast
Let's face it u were nvr good at text,Book.. Mayb if u read 1 in class ud b better an pass.
This faggot couldn't save the strength to make a grade. Try an sway an pay.
Cus If this lame complains....... I'll have Bookmarked for tryna fucking Change the Page.
Once I step on this Note, they'll be nothin left to expose
Ill stab this bitch w/ an effortless poke,
.......................... Pull out a Key and Peele his wig back faster than a Sketch on the Show.
This fucking delinquent will suffer once I cut an I rip shit.
Keep frontin w/ a Hard Cover, Book...... N end up on the Edge of a Destructive Condition.
This a David vs Goliah an I doubt seeing this pest fight
.................... you'll see him Jet from facing a Giant... Like this was Preseason @ MetLife.
This kid is worthless, n U don't wanna meet in person I'm very violent
Show your mug, & end up getting ur Face Bashed..... worse than The Roast of Paradigm.
U might consider this Peer Pressure when I drop Notebook.. this cocks Over
So ima Hand u ur first L u seeing on the Sight..... like Medical Marijuianna for Glaucoma.

Note..

I don't budge when old fucks push my patience, eyes low and seethin'
You're mentally weak and lack energy, kid. So as hard as you try, you can't move me like failed Psychokinesis
nope
A stale pile of feces is more "The Shit" than you'll ever be
NOBODY FEELS YOU, and it's CLEARLY not because we lack empathy...
short and to the point, liked it
Your efforts are never seen as effective with lines parallel to these
And from the Right Angle, Not Even Hypothetically
saw where u were trying to go with this but was not effective
Don't need a Long Thread to prove he's Bitch-Made, so this punk stays nervous
Cross Dressin' like Christian Women at Sunday Service
too much of a reach
Lift your skirt, and I see that you ain't from the hard-knocks
If you've ever seen Sham Rock, it was probably in your Lucky Charms Box
lol dope nameplay/flip
Get laid Face Flat on the Ground for exuding some ruthlessness
Put your Up-Side Down like Odd Future did to the Crucifix
sick multis, overall fresh concept. Liked this alot
I'm the God of this rap shit. Your crew gets throttled for breaking my sole commandments
If you Gruesome Intellect, you'd be Smart Enough to not follow your Man's Sin / Manson
couldnt been dope but fell flat
But, copycats reenact mistakes... So, it's best to Zip It Up before you catch the Body-Bag treatment fast;
Free At Last! Like Martin Luther's speech "I Have A Dream" before the heater-blast...
something different. Creative, feeling this. Could've shortened up the set-up line

Gamble..

This homos whack... I'll merk em in seconds, once I choke this fag?
Ill Carry Note across the Bridge before The Drop like I was harmonizing in Vocal Class.
sick metaphors, rhyme schemes. Dope punch
I sever this fag, once I step on a track I'm sending him fast
Let's face it u were nvr good at text,Book.. Mayb if u read 1 in class ud b better an pass.
Damn! another dope punch. multis on point
This faggot couldn't save the strength to make a grade. Try an sway an pay.
Cus If this lame complains....... I'll have Bookmarked for tryna fucking Change the Page.
nice. multis bringing everything together
Once I step on this Note, they'll be nothin left to expose
Ill stab this bitch w/ an effortless poke,
.......................... Pull out a Key and Peele his wig back faster than a Sketch on the Show.
very solid punch. name flips crazy
This fucking delinquent will suffer once I cut an I rip shit.
Keep frontin w/ a Hard Cover, Book...... N end up on the Edge of a Destructive Condition.
this coulda been lotb, had so much potential but fell flat at the end
This a David vs Goliah an I doubt seeing this pest fight
.................... you'll see him Jet from facing a Giant... Like this was Preseason @ MetLife.
liked this
This kid is worthless, n U don't wanna meet in person I'm very violent
Show your mug, & end up getting ur Face Bashed..... worse than The Roast of Paradigm.
eehh okish
U might consider this Peer Pressure when I drop Notebook.. this cocks Over
So ima Hand u ur first L u seeing on the Sight..... like Medical Marijuianna for Glaucoma.
cool closer

Note had hits n misses. enough attempts were there to make his verse an enjoyable read. Gamble was killing the nameplays on Notebook. Fell off a little in the 2nd half of his verse but was consistent overall.

Vote-Gamble

Votes....

Thanks @jilti

1-0 up

Votes?

Felt like Gambles punches had more of an effect and were executed better, not too in depth bc I'm Mobile right now. Gamble came with name flips and better worded punches. Note fought back admirably but fell short in the end. Still both we're good reads.

Vote: Gamble.

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I think Notebooks lines were good. When I read them the first time, I was very impressed. When I went back to read them to how they'd flow to a beat, I had trouble. It was a dope verse.

When I read Sho Money EMG's lines, at first I was not impressed. But, as I read, it became better and better.

Reading both back, imagining a beat, Sho Money EMG's flowed better. And, I think it had better content within, as well.

/v Sho Money EMG

Nothing, seemed like this verse could've been aimed towards anyone. You came very generic which ruined the direction for you punches.

Vs

Opener, textbook, MetLife. You focused to muchon nameplays which gets overdone and annoying other then that you came pretty consistent nothing over the top or haymaker but decent jabs throughout. Stay away from a nameplay every bar.

Sho Money

N book was decent but the style it's archaic.
Didn't really hit hardbut had good i ideas.

Gamble had good nps.
One of his better verses with decent execution.
I loved the opener.

V gamble

NOTE

I don't budge when old fucks push my patience, eyes low and seethin'
You're mentally weak and lack energy, kid. So as hard as you try, you can't move me like failed Psychokinesis
Good bar. All around except flow dipped a bit in quality at the end
A stale pile of feces is more "The Shit" than you'll ever be
NOBODY FEELS YOU, and it's CLEARLY not because we lack empathy...
simple but nice bar, haven't really see cats reference empathy as much.
Your efforts are never seen as effective with lines parallel to these
And from the Right Angle, Not Even Hypothetically
I get the science of this line but it doesn't really sting as much as the other two. It's decent.
Don't need a Long Thread to prove he's Bitch-Made, so this punk stays nervous
Cross Dressin' like Christian Women at Sunday Service
Didn't like this line, punch was too played, and the connectivity attempt was too shallow
Lift your skirt, and I see that you ain't from the hard-knocks
If you've ever seen Sham Rock, it was probably in your Lucky Charms Box
decent bar all around. Funny but it's not the freshest concept.
Get laid Face Flat on the Ground for exuding some ruthlessness
Put your Up-Side Down like Odd Future did to the Crucifix
Nice line. Almost up there with your opener.
I'm the God of this rap shit. Your crew gets throttled for breaking my sole commandments
If you Gruesome Intellect, you'd be Smart Enough to not follow your Man's Sin / Manson
Your best bar! I never seen the gruesome WP, dope shit.
But, copycats reenact mistakes... So, it's best to Zip It Up before you catch the Body-Bag treatment fast;
Free At Last! Like Martin Luther's speech "I Have A Dream" before the heater-blast...
pretty good closer.

GAMBLE

This homos whack... I'll merk em in seconds, once I choke this fag?
Ill Carry Note across the Bridge before The Drop like I was harmonizing in Vocal Class.
woa! Fresh concept and dope for how it connects on different levels. U take the opener
I sever this fag, once I step on a track I'm sending him fast
Let's face it u were nvr good at text,Book.. Mayb if u read 1 in class ud b better an pass.
flow was ill, concept was simple but very effective.
This faggot couldn't save the strength to make a grade. Try an sway an pay.
Cus If this lame complains....... I'll have Bookmarked for tryna fucking Change the Page.
Didn't like this. At all. I feel note takes this bar easily.
Once I step on this Note, they'll be nothin left to expose
Ill stab this bitch w/ an effortless poke,
.......................... Pull out a Key and Peele his wig back faster than a Sketch on the Show
very fresh creative line and the flow was cool impact was good. Dope bar!.
This fucking delinquent will suffer once I cut an I rip shit.
Keep frontin w/ a Hard Cover, Book...... N end up on the Edge of a Destructive Condition.
merely decent
This a David vs Goliah an I doubt seeing this pest fight
.................... you'll see him Jet from facing a Giant... Like this was Preseason @ MetLife.
decent bar. Really like the setup but the punch being played takes away from it.
This kid is worthless, n U don't wanna meet in person I'm very violent
Show your mug, & end up getting ur Face Bashed..... worse than The Roast of Paradigm.
ok bar
U might consider this Peer Pressure when I drop Notebook.. this cocks Over
So ima Hand u ur first L u seeing on the Sight..... like Medical Marijuianna for Glaucoma.
not the freshest line but it's still worded in a way to be solid.

I think gamble had the more creative lines but note had the more scientific lines. It's a tough battle to vote on but I think gamble edges this out due to lines that stood out a bit more in terms of creativity, impact, and set up.

V/Gamble