Atomic vs TheEnd - ATOMIC WINS
 

10 lines, due tmrw midnight

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@TheEnd

Check..

@TheEnd after u sir, assuming u show.

I don’t expect to much, more so here 2 make things clear
Cuz we’ve all already seen ur best before u even posted here ^
Fuck this clown ur shit, I knw it all rings a bell, my hits keep em dazed
N if that’s his best, damn its that easy 2 make the NBL these days?
U think u fly shit plz, 1 hit will leave his face blue.. see it as a gift
N A’ll come out swinging, I know… landing’s what he has a problem with
Throw em off a rail, when u drop its played though it’ll come in time
Cuz atomic can equal great forced, see its displayed in each verse n every line
Everything u do is sloppy, u labeled yaself not knowing the meaning son
N ya synonyms nuclear, just in ur drops…. no1 has yet to see one

fuck it, hope u show @Atomic

lol.

ur dead when im rippin keys, bars make u backflip then hit u, G.
if we said he's got a lot of power, it's the dealth penalty w/ high voltage electricity.
grab the gat & blast hard demolition derby time to crash cars,
& ur verse in a battle? we'll hear TheEnd ruined it for us all, & that's not only ur last bar.
rip ya chess w/ the katana now ur dead u dumb pawn,
slice ya throat & give ya a redneck then leave 'em chillin on a couch in his front lawn.
don't give a fuck who u are, or what ur even about son,
voting for me is honestly a no brainer, & fucker i'll leave u without one.
lmaooo faggot, u'll get down on 1 knee for ur man just to see if the ring fits
it'd be a joke if i said ur spittin NoBull... but u are getting disrespected by the king bitch.

http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php...newpost&t=8647
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Uppin, bump whatever... vote!

Uppin again damn this pretty dead

Atomic got this pretty ez.... TheEnd... I don't want to just bash ur style or w/e... I feel like u grasp text more than some of these scrubs, but still need to work on always being harsh w/ ur lines... Simple yet effective, and if ur trying to be funny... You want that to be clear.. Work on constructing a good concept for a punch, and then use wording to make it sting more.

anyways... Mvgt: ATOMIC

^^^^^

vote atomic

The end tried.. I kinda like ur approach, but u have to develop more creative concepts..

Some sort of schemes

Something other than just typing out statements about ur opponent. Tie in a punch, metaphor, or play off his name. Try to create unpredictable lines...

Vote atomic

Atoomic u need to work oon cleaning up your wording. Like in the second bar that wording was maybe the worst of the verse

2-0 Atomic

UP

Throw em off a rail, when u drop its played though it’ll come in time
Cuz atomic can equal great forced, see its displayed in each verse n every line

vs.

ur dead when im rippin keys, bars make u backflip then hit u, G.
if we said he's got a lot of power, it's the dealth penalty w/ high voltage electricity.
don't give a fuck who u are, or what ur even about son,
voting for me is honestly a no brainer, & fucker i'll leave u without one.
^played concept
lmaooo faggot, u'll get down on 1 knee for ur man just to see if the ring fits
it'd be a joke if i said ur spittin NoBull... but u are getting disrespected by the king bitch.

Pretty decent battle. End needs to be more creative and work on his wording and overall structure. Atomic had some played ideas, but gets this with more quotes. Props to both.

Vote; Atomic.

Nothing

vs.

ur dead when im rippin keys, bars make u backflip then hit u, G.
if we said he's got a lot of power, it's the dealth penalty w/ high voltage electricity.
grab the gat & blast hard demolition derby time to crash cars,
& ur verse in a battle? we'll hear TheEnd ruined it for us all, & that's not only ur last bar

The first quote is generous, I haven't seen TheEnd battle much so idk if that second bar is played or not but I liked it. Probably the best out of either verse.

TheEnd should read some battles and elevate. Not trying to be an asshole, but there's just a lot to work on. Atomic was at least decent.

v/Atomic