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gitto138 08-03-2014 07:15 PM

A torn Script
 
Scriptures time is up, and time square's a building,
PIE r squared is a symbol. NOT something you resemble,
Put dramatics aside for a minute and get in the assembly
line for a melodramatic religious blessing,
This is a sacrilegious mathematics lesson,
So equip your self for an epigrammatic revision session.
Exhibit A...
John 14:12

12. .Verily, verily, I say unto you, He that believeth on me, the works that I do shall he do also; and greater works than these shall[/B] he do; because I go unto my Father.I Believe my
Freedom released my feebleness, and absorbed
deep into your epidermis,
the evilness transformed,
conceived through my readable, although is amorphous,
will i make you feasible\ nervous? A circus
tents around your house to raise equal awareness,
the thermos gauge's engaged to blaze the furnace
on purpose, they dared us,
u scared cuz,
im bout to snorkel to the surface
of one of my verses,
Corporal, merciless, morphing invertebrates,
Resourcefulness performance, results in revolting
torturous turbulence, so anything you say is restored by immortal endurance, i have increased my insurance premiums recently to briefly adore all humans, but humanity's inhumane, and you gain a considerable amount of glorified fame jus to refuse it!!

Eŋg 08-05-2014 03:44 PM

this was sort of nonsense. are you pulling your wordbank from memory or consulting a dictionary? i suggest that you don't. i don't know if you do. i know some people would, and think it's legit. it just disagrees with me. but yea a lot of this was shot the way you wrote it up... experiment more with how you rhyme, too. you don't need to have singular words of matching syllables and shit like that -- you can have a few monosyllables or something that has a larger count. it doesn't really matter. it's better if i rhyme ben nevis with excessive as opposed to expressive kinda thing. maybe it's not better but i think you can see what i mean? probably (not).

you're not ass. just focus more when you write.


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