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veritas 07-12-2013 12:23 PM

the best worst best writer
 
Shoot man…is this how they do it?

I easily abort the hospital where idle threats are born:
Then fake my own death, in the name of locking lips with Wendy Pheffercorn
Problem is: you play ball like a girl
Problem is: swine trample the pearl
Ask the worst of the worst, I am a pro De-escalator
See I stepped my game up while you kats chose the escalator
If your life is a stage, then just consider VERITAS the audience,
but we can still play compare chains just to see whose are the gaudiest
Cuz ima rap my grill in aluminum ferls reverse gangbanging the golden girls
I might not be the father, but I knock her back out, like V is their epidurals
As the Milky Way cannibalizes Sagittarius,
damn apes compare whose backs the hairiest
the nine dimensions interlock
but porn was made for your cock
the grand words you write, the noble aspirations you espouse
but in the real world you are a miserable sinner inside and out ya house
join the club buddy, my souls’ muddy and ancient, loving and patient
my spacious spaceship is vacant, terrestrial faces are racist and wasted
I am outside of time, outside of space, we hold these truths to be self-evident
Although your open mics are free to read it is obvious they sell excrement
Aloof.
Making the complex simple is the true mark of genius
A smile on ya chicks lips is a clue they harped on my penis
I can talk about anything and everything, I find inspiration in anthills
I find desperation in google searching images of corporate landfills
While the same nameless suits sell water to third world citizens in the name of profit
I just sit back and sharpen my sword…..the apocalyptic prophet
VERITAS is on some other stuff. Call the bluff of the site’s best writers
Want imagery? Picture sprinkling soy sauce on your sac in a cage fulla tigers
While others wax and wane in profane ciphers:
I say comb your beard to commander Rikers
While living feared, riding with Christian bikers,
Aslyun, the hobbit, lorena bobbit, and cold fission mcguyvers
It is easy to free associate, which is all the upper echelons of this site do
Just remember that VERITAS provides the portal of which they pierce thru

Vulgar 07-12-2013 11:45 PM

I easily abort the hospital where idle threats are born:
Then fake my own death, in the name of locking lips with Wendy Pheffercorn
^I can't place why the first line is unique. Aborting a hospital is a cool idea. I imagine that's what the Joker did in the Dark Knight. lol, is Wendy Pheffercorn an actual woman?
Problem is: you play ball like a girl
Problem is: swine trample the pearl
Ask the worst of the worst, I am a pro De-escalator
See I stepped my game up while you kats chose the escalator
If your life is a stage, then just consider VERITAS the audience,
but we can still play compare chains just to see whose are the gaudiest
Cuz ima rap my grill in aluminum ferls reverse gangbanging the golden girls
I might not be the father, but I knock her back out, like V is their epidurals
As the Milky Way cannibalizes Sagittarius,
damn apes compare whose backs the hairiest
the nine dimensions interlock
^These three lines above I thought were nice.
but porn was made for your cock
^This one not so much. Felt like a copout just to rhyme.
the grand words you write, the noble aspirations you espouse
but in the real world you are a miserable sinner inside and out ya house
join the club buddy, my souls’ muddy and ancient, loving and patient
my spacious spaceship is vacant, terrestrial faces are racist and wasted
I am outside of time, outside of space, we hold these truths to be self-evident
Although your open mics are free to read it is obvious they sell excrement
Aloof.
Making the complex simple is the true mark of genius
A smile on ya chicks lips is a clue they harped on my penis
I can talk about anything and everything, I find inspiration in anthills
I find desperation in google searching images of corporate landfills
^This line above is one is very real, and relatable. One thing I find to be valuable about google images is that you can type in something you've been thinking about and brainstorm it as you browse through the pictures. The "show me more" option signifies our hunger to further our knowledge in the pursuit of the closure that embodies the what's and why's, of daily ruckus.
While the same nameless suits sell water to third world citizens in the name of profit
I just sit back and sharpen my sword…..the apocalyptic prophet
^Cool bar.
VERITAS is on some other stuff. Call the bluff of the site’s best writers
Want imagery? Picture sprinkling soy sauce on your sac in a cage fulla tigers
While others wax and wane in profane ciphers:
I say comb your beard to commander Rikers
^Star Trek reference?
While living feared, riding with Christian bikers,
Aslyun, the hobbit, lorena bobbit, and cold fission mcguyvers
It is easy to free associate, which is all the upper echelons of this site do
Just remember that VERITAS provides the portal of which they pierce thru
^You are an interesting yet sometimes implacable user name on Netcees with a good deal of influence. One thing you can work on is to approach topicals with a more empty-headed approach, without the persona of VERITAS. Lately if I read a verse I'd know it was you instantly. I think that the ability to camouflage (not to be fake/not yourself) but to "get into the role" of your verse writing spirit of the moment, would work to your advantage in more ways than one.

Keep doing you


if you have time, check out my latest

Atomic 07-13-2013 12:00 AM

Cuz ima rap my grill in aluminum ferls reverse gangbanging the golden girls

stopped reading after that^ gave me a very scary image

it was cool though.

Coup 07-13-2013 04:47 AM

I found your musings to be very amusing :) Like your bold voice as I said in your last piece...

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It is easy to free associate, which is all the upper echelons of this site do
Elaborate.

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I am outside of time, outside of space, we hold these truths to be self-evident
Although your open mics are free to read it is obvious they sell excrement
good first bar imo...and you blew it on the second haha.

overall I feel you are not saying what you want...relax a bit and focus more on what's important to you and not to the perception of others.


read this all and did enjoy

veritas 07-13-2013 10:25 AM

Wow. Excellent feed. Thanks guys. Will take it to heart.

StarFaggot 07-17-2013 10:38 PM

Wendy Pheffercorn is from the Sandlot and so is the you play ball like a girl reference. If you haven't seen the sandlot you need to its a classic.

Darth Yoda 07-18-2013 02:35 AM

Wendy Pherfecorn23rokl lmao so hard to type <.<!

I liked this.
especially wendyspfpfehrceron lol lmao
You should put a few ounces of raw emotion in each line, then revise it so it isn't just raw emotion, and focus on each line for about a few stanzas, then post I'd love to see!

landfill/anthill

veritas 07-19-2013 10:55 AM

great feed yoda. I agree. my prob is that I just keystyle everything. I never sit down and plot. if i did I may become a national secuity threat.

I love your face.

Wise Wiggles 07-19-2013 12:14 PM

^ same problem..

btw Wendy <33333333

Void 07-19-2013 05:42 PM

Yes.

Pakistani Hand Cannon 07-28-2013 02:58 PM

cause it was you, i wasnt expecting much...but i actually liked parts of this, some lines i didnt like...
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Making the complex simple is the true mark of genius
A smile on ya chicks lips is a clue they harped on my penis
second line just doesnt do the first line justice for me, but considering the title, maybe you're aim was to produce this type of vibe? wdeva
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but in the real world you are a miserable sinner inside and out ya house
join the club buddy, my souls’ muddy and ancient, loving and patient

my spacious spaceship is vacant, terrestrial faces are racist and wasted
same problem, but rather than an injustice, i feel the contrivance (imo) of wording on the third line just take away from the other two, but shit that also means i liked the first two lines
Quote:

See I stepped my game up while you kats chose the escalator
If your life is a stage, then just consider VERITAS the audience,
but we can still play compare chains just to see whose are the gaudiest
that shit just comes off nice, aint gonna put it any other way

blah

on the whole, i'll just say i didnt mind reading this...take it how you want

#1

God Of War 07-28-2013 05:30 PM

this was cool there was a few goood parts looks a bit scattered though but non the less it had its moments


If your life is a stage, then just consider VERITAS the audience,
but we can still play compare chains just to see whose are the gaudiest

that was a really dope bar i thought and the flow was nice


join the club buddy, my souls’ muddy and ancient, loving and patient
my spacious spaceship is vacant, terrestrial faces are racist and wasted
I am outside of time, outside of space, we hold these truths to be self-evident
Although your open mics are free to read it is obvious they sell excrement

thought that part was nice as fuck to really cool content


over all I thought this was really dope as i said it was a bit scattered but the content was nice, weird at times but still cool. weird is more interesting then common imo

dope drop


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