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YDK 07-27-2014 11:18 PM

cow rhymes with how now and pow among other things
 
Rhyming; a diamond in the rough, blind to the bluff finding its enough simply grinding it up. Mind in the rough, Golf swing, sandwedge binding and cuffs. Divine intervention unmentioned, menstrual cycle delayed for attention. Baby on the way baby on board, Maybe the baby is crazy and bored. Shady ignored me in the cold You Dont Know me I'm Stan(ding) in the rain with a board that says dont ignore me if you can afford! Brain fart; sane? Start! Go with it get lifted hit it at 2 miles a minute blow it out slow it down and sit in it i'm finished! Visions of visionary's visiting cemetarys cementing the corpses incoorperating the dignitary's get a fucking dictionary! I'm gettin heated undefeated seeded lower than Jesus in mary's womb before the tomb when she cheated (believe it!) I prefer the scenic route, weeds, droughts, keepin the demons out with a bitch blunt and a pleasing mouth you're freakin out! no i'm not, grow the pot and load a crock of shit with some rocks and locust; Rot! Fertilize the fertilizer with verbalized urbanization and I'll become the merchandiser advertising with conversation. Leave no stone unturned burn the bridges and homes then witness the vicious cycle in the life of a drone. Tomb stones fighting for survival while awaiting arrivals, primal urges conquered ending the spiral and it all comes back to rhyming; and the idol is final.

YDK 07-28-2014 12:07 AM

@Zen you mention nonsensical rhymes the other day an I've been wanting to use the paragraph style. Watcha think?

Zen 07-28-2014 01:04 AM

The rhyming was good. Had some good alliteration with v's and c's in the vision/cemetery line as well. Cool beans.

big baby 07-28-2014 04:00 PM

me and @dull boy to start taxing anybody who starts writing like this

Zen 07-28-2014 04:36 PM

i dun diddly do dah dun diddly

YDK 07-28-2014 04:45 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by big baby (Post 371537)
me and @dull boy to start taxing anybody who starts writing like this

i refuse to pay till i'm invited to msg

UnbornBuddha 07-28-2014 06:05 PM

This had a nice alliteration to it. It seemed to be more of a free piece, some random thoughts. Obviously it was coherent, it wasn't like a madmen just scribbling his ideas. It had a sense of structure to it.
I enjoyed the flow of this, especially this lines:
Leave no stone unturned burn the bridges and homes then witness the vicious cycle in the life of a drone.

This seemed more like an experimental piece. It didn't seem you were trying convey something in particular, but more on the extend on play on words, and certain sounds.

Anyways, thank you for sharing. Also what a funny thread title.

DexLabb 07-28-2014 09:00 PM

remember what i was saying about the entire fkin forum writing as a singular organism. the one style is this dumbass shit and the other one is writing nuclear physics poems. OVER IT BREH

YDK 07-28-2014 09:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DexLabb (Post 371741)
remember what i was saying about the entire fkin forum writing as a singular organism. the one style is this dumbass shit and the other one is writing nuclear physics poems. OVER IT BREH

Then leave lol I use this as a writing exercise not to impress you. Don't read it don't feed it I don't mind, just shut the fuck up if all you gonna do is complain bout shit that you can't compete with

Zen 07-28-2014 09:52 PM

I think it's strange how people see paragraphs as a seperate style in its own but I never saw it that way. I approach writing everything the same way and drop it as which ever one I think will make it easier or better to read. Paragraphs are better for verses like this, flexes, because the reader's eyes follow along instead of dropping down to the next line. Other pieces besides flexes I think are better for all other types of drops. The new line will give the line more "impact" I guess is the right word?

Lol I'm high and for some reason felt like explaining this. DexLabb is a gay.

Adverse 07-28-2014 11:36 PM

What everyone else said, the alliteration and flow were on fucking point, i'd be interested to see how this sounded in an audio track. I love crazy rhyme schemes like the ones you displayed. This was cool bro.


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