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Malachi 07-22-2014 12:02 AM

Oatmeal (Malachi & Paradigm)
 
M:

Attacking competition armed with compositions
I spot the visions of wack niggas locked in prisons
Rhymes fly enough to mock a flock of pigeons
Prophet came back like a refund or re-run
of a television show, watchin the Benjamins grow
Clouded mind s'why son aint never shinnin
but wit a reign like this the sun aint never shinnin
My bars reach ya like a fist from sharkeisha,
Rappin wit sharp features, let the sharp featured god teach ya
Infectin mics wit propofoll the protocoll causein only pros to fall
Since a snotty nose I knew id body foes, nigs buyin my audios like adios
And since a minor ive been seein these goals
The troubled soul on double shoals
Thats who I be, just tearin mics,
A cool, skinny nigga bout fair in height
The author wit word hotter than 3 digit Fahrenheit
Behind the bars but the cell see us, not
They wont ever see us flop
Please believe i drop the steez and if they sleepin they catch disease
Mal nutritioned the game leavin these lames malnutritioned
and not to mention itd be malignant to call malignant
Fuck wit him and youll be done in an an instant

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P:

Battle to the death - Collapse ya lungs wit a fist, yo
Only Hunger Games you particpate in is fucking... Hungry Hungry Hippo
Caught ya mom blowing me on the stairs; bout to bang hoe
next step something rose in her mouth like I was teaching her to tango
Mechanized weapon suits from section fives test recruits
the stock options dissapointed... more than Aero's investing group
Sent the mechs back & thanked them for letting vets see
but they need upgrades across the board... Rap Battles and Netcees
Chalk boards with bars & rhyme schemes written across'em
I got an off the wall style... ironic the best in the Biz are, awesome
Ounces of haze I lounge & I gaze; denounce and I praise
crossing lines off the wall like prison cells have from counting the days

Certain 07-22-2014 12:20 AM

@oats?

Kin 07-22-2014 07:44 AM

Mal-

Infectin mics wit propofoll the protocoll causein only pros to fall
Since a snotty nose I knew id body foes, nigs buyin my audios like adios
that shits was fire....I like your style...similar to my "audio" style how you flip words a lot...don't see that often in text..I was impressed wit' that piece

Par-

Mechanized weapon suits from section fives test recruits
some canibus' type shit..nice

crossing lines off the wall like prison cells have from counting the days

endin' is Dope on this

Not a fan of how you started this tho' wit' the rhymes of Yo,Po, Hoe pretty simple compared to what Mal was puttin' out...plus the whole "I caught ya mom blowin' me"...why is this corny 1st grade insult style so in wit' text nowadayz...Not diggin' that part at all...But I'm not hatin' on the verse cuz' You still brought heat in other sections juz should of kept it all to match Mal's content better since it was a Collab...feel me?


But overall good Mix up of styles...woulda like to see the content of verses more similar but still a good Read

HoLLa

Split 07-22-2014 01:14 PM

Malachi came dope but stop emulating Joey

Split 07-22-2014 01:14 PM

Rappin wit sharp features, let the sharp featured god teach ya
@Sharp Nine?

Sharp 07-22-2014 03:44 PM

Had no knowledge of this lol

While im here I dug the malignant line and rose in her mouth destroyed me lmao

Witty 07-22-2014 04:09 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Split (Post 367433)
Malachi came dope but stop emulating Joey


Paradigm 07-22-2014 05:16 PM

LOL at oatmeal wtf

anyways cool stuff malachi enjoyed the flow and creativity but execution of concepts was kinda lacking... sorry again for the delay writers block and modding these sheep is a bitch

Malachi 07-24-2014 10:39 AM

I didn't try to "emulate" Joey on purpose. I rap what I like to hear lol.
And word, kinda threw it together myself
@namix maybe? I like when he breaks down my shit lol

Paradigm 07-25-2014 09:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kin (Post 367326)
Not a fan of how you started this tho' wit' the rhymes of Yo,Po, Hoe pretty simple compared to what Mal was puttin' out...plus the whole "I caught ya mom blowin' me"...why is this corny 1st grade insult style so in wit' text nowadayz...Not diggin' that part at all...But I'm not hatin' on the verse cuz' You still brought heat in other sections juz should of kept it all to match Mal's content better since it was a Collab...feel me?


But overall good Mix up of styles...woulda like to see the content of verses more similar but still a good Read

HoLLa

fist-yo/hippo bang-hoe/tango mechanized weapon suits/section five test recruits/investing groups ahhhhh... multi syllable rhyme schemes! LOL word. damnit. I suck.

Thanks for the feed.

Vulgar 07-25-2014 11:33 PM

This was alright.

And since a minor ive been seein these goals
The troubled soul
^This was the best part because you were honest. The rest was sort of contrived for me. Couldn't get into it but not bad, overall.

Para

Cool verse, I like the concepts you play around with. This was decent.

Caught ya mom blowing me on the stairs; bout to bang hoe
next step something rose in her mouth like I was teaching her to tango
^Hah

Malachi 07-26-2014 04:30 AM

@Vulgar
Wym
Contrived how?

Paradigm 07-26-2014 05:09 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vulgar (Post 370453)
This was alright.

And since a minor ive been seein these goals
The troubled soul
^This was the best part because you were honest. The rest was sort of contrived for me. Couldn't get into it but not bad, overall.

Para

Cool verse, I like the concepts you play around with. This was decent.

Caught ya mom blowing me on the stairs; bout to bang hoe
next step something rose in her mouth like I was teaching her to tango
^Hah

Word. I like that creative stuff. We need to get in a Group Therapy pt II soon. @Neighbor

oats 07-26-2014 08:40 AM

I appreciate the homage, gentlemen

Vulgar 07-26-2014 11:39 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Malachi (Post 370523)
@Vulgar
Wym
Contrived how?

Please believe i drop the steez
^Stuff like this is forced. Just my opinion.


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