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ill nik-A 07-03-2013 11:32 AM

What Life
 
Brawl with titans in the kingdom of jungle lions they bring law & guidance
It’s an awe to science how we applaud a God but are drawn to violence
Someone call the tyrants we want to see a falling giant’s appalled defiance
A strong alliance, a government’s remedy blames the enemy when they install a virus
default reliance, u refer to the news’ views built only to maul your iris
the cult is silenced in a world controlled by stolen gold they fault the Mayans
these frauds have sirens, but who all decided as we stand tall, divided
sell some wealth then assault the clients, tell me who really caused the riots?!
the fear of war’s a crisis to even make soldiers insult the privates
false compliance, this would never happen if the man above designed it
St John’s a bias but can’t argue with he who talks the wisest after he walked the mileage
Who crossed the highest?! not everyone who falls then rises… love what life is!

Spoken 07-03-2013 11:35 AM

This was fucking fire.... Nice scheme and straight dope from start to finish liked some ideas a lot and everything just stayed strong in place... Content well natured in this and the spread of diversity while keeping the same annunciation flow thru consistent? Nice man really a pretty strong drop just wish it had more

CopyPat 07-03-2013 01:20 PM

dope shit man. shitty lack of feeds. i like this alot. flow was obviously smooth. multi's eh?? haha it worked. usually if someone uses the same rhyme scheme for a whole verse like this it gets really stretched and forced. this wasn't so props there. i liked the message/content in this.. pretty really shit. i think everyone can agree with. just a solid little open mic. enjoyed it, you should post more in here

Rojo187 07-03-2013 06:29 PM

Shyt was wicked...the flow is so refined its like I can spit that...

I believe you can only reach a certain pinnacle of hotness thru text...then you have to jump to audio...

I dunno if you do...but you should...then we can see your delivery and emotion...
but otherwise....one of the best I seen so far during my short stint...

Coup 07-03-2013 07:25 PM

I know ya for a battler...so I was reading this that way though its a topical...little bit wordy, flow was rigid due to that...lines punched, good setups...you carried that over. I precieved you forced things to rhyme. ALl made sense so I ain't trying to trip.

content was sharp and you knew what ya speaking on...seemed legit and not something out your element.

good drop

Mike Wrecka 07-03-2013 09:24 PM

dope

news views built only to maul your iris
sick

good shit

ill nik-A 07-10-2013 03:47 PM

Thx

EbadiBeats 07-10-2013 05:02 PM

It was cool. It's much better to be simple and dope than be complex and dope. I liked your flow the most. Put your skills on a mic so we can see how much talent you really possess.

ill nik-A 07-10-2013 06:38 PM

Why a mic? I'm not a rapper I'm a writer... I'm passed that stage

Thx

EbadiBeats 07-10-2013 07:09 PM

Do you have your own book? Your own website with scriptures?

If not, it generally starts by writing up texts to actually recording them. At the very least, I would recommend doing acapellas.

Most of us start with texts in middle school, in highschool it grows to audio... and if you get good at it you continue or go into some other fields. Not to sound degrading to texts.

God Of War 07-10-2013 08:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by EbadiBeats (Post 92798)
Do you have your own book? Your own website with scriptures?

If not, it generally starts by writing up texts to actually recording them. At the very least, I would recommend doing acapellas.

Most of us start with texts in middle school, in highschool it grows to audio... and if you get good at it you continue or go into some other fields. Not to sound degrading to texts.

wtf, text is not a stepping stone, its its own field of writing.

if you play pick up games in the park at 16 yuo can still play them at thirty even if you dont aspire to be a nba star



btw nik this was dope as fuck your flow was nasty i like how you got a completely different style when writing om's then when battling



Someone call the tyrants we want to see a falling giant’s appalled defiance
A strong alliance, a government’s remedy blames the enemy when they install a virus
default reliance, u refer to the news’ views built only to maul your iris
the cult is silenced in a world controlled by stolen gold they fault the Mayans


that was ridiculous right there

9/10

rofl remember when theyd do that back in the day?

ill nik-A 07-10-2013 08:20 PM

Haha yesss

I agree funny thing is I rapped in high school

Coup 07-10-2013 08:29 PM

why do people think writing is easy ?

EbadiBeats 07-10-2013 08:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Coup (Post 92853)
why do people think writing is easy ?

It's not... Recording is just the next level.

Recording = Writing + Mic Skills (Delivery, Emotion, etc)

Writing = Writing.

You do the math.

Coup 07-10-2013 08:46 PM

true true....it's not ness. the required next level....ya know what i mean

Otpeks 07-11-2013 12:24 AM

St John’s a bias but can’t argue with he who talks the wisest after he walked the mileage

^
Illy good read nik

Darth Yoda 07-11-2013 01:21 AM

Hemingway > Rappers.

There is no next level, just because it flows smoothly doesn't mean you HAVE to rap or do spoken word. There are even writers who internally rhyme in storytelling and the reader doesn't even know. There are writers far beyond what you think is 'good' or well written.

yawn

Darth Yoda 07-11-2013 01:22 AM

This was good nikka! I didn't mean to sound mean, it wasn't towards you, but to that one commenter. I liked the ability to sound connecting and not talking about pagan stuff and religious blah super solar systems. Dope.


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