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butterfly knife into your jugular, choke
out a guttural note. black moth super rust in the spokes
i wanted to know who you became after we ended off. you never called
you're no muse. you're an episode. empress of the epilogue
tentacles you cross like pentecostal depiction
talk to me the way you talk to the children. with composition
stop at jewel-osco when i walk to division
buy you twenty truffles and a pasta with chicken
brickyard manor, project building flatline college tradition
web-registered for pottery for something to piss in
jackets in the cubby. wearing sox in the kitchen
milk-and-cookie midnight hour where monsters revisit
its a mantra we live in. idiot. we're idioms alive
raging towards machinery in systems of a rise
symptomatic times, cold-sore lip sync every tune
there's someone here. i only wish it was you.

you're no muse. you're an episode. empress of the epilogue
that line was crazy to me....

who style is nice on this...creative way of wording everything
almost ghost face'ish

ending was solid

enjoyed the read my dude

HoLLa

This was dope bro.

you pronounce pasta, Paw, sta? its PAAA - stah

don't know why you keep this talent only on this website. This isn't the usual fanatical commentary, but your writing can be understood and grasped on any technical level there is, whether it be on a hip hop forum, a poetry outlet, a writing source, a newspaper. Anything. You could pose this as any form of writing and it would be appreciated by a lot of people. I used to have a huge cultivating mass based on many forms of writing I had, including poetry, and verses like these. I discarded it for personal issues, but wish I hadn't. Theres poets and writers out there that don't have a trinket of talent that some of us possess. This verse was quantitative and excessive in its little drops that pooled the readers mind with a connective ebb. Keep it up man, liked it. Also liked the subtle play of titles between you and Zomb. nice

Cubs > White Sox

"brickyard manor, project building flatline college tradition
web-registered for pottery for something to piss in"

best sentences.

this was very nice. not trying to quote because I'm using my phone, but you had mny dope lines. The rhtm of the entire piece made me wanna nod to it. Did feel like a gritty poem at times but your wording was on point. Not a long verse but didn't end abruptly which shows you weren't forcing things. All in all a really refreshing read.

you were on RF right? @Half Wit It

i used to fuck with yours and STRONGARMs work heavily.

bug baby thx for your super seriousness it is rare and gemlike

you're no muse. you're an episode. empress of the epilogue

there's someone here. i only wish it was you.

these hit hard on many levels. I echo baby's sentiment.