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Rawn M.D. 06-29-2013 01:31 PM

Rawn MacDon vs Figurative (SnF) - RAWN WINS 4-0
 
12 lines
SWAG n FLOW
due 6/30 @ 11:59 pm PST - EXT'd for Figurative

normal rules
no biting
no swaying
no recycling
@Figurative

Rawn M.D. 06-29-2013 01:32 PM

check

voted on Flo Real vs AlPo swag n flow
and
Voted on Flo Real vs Serios swag n flow @Sharp Nine (ur welcome =D, now plz clean the thread.)

Fig 06-29-2013 01:35 PM

Check

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=7314
http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?p=86902#post86902

Rawn M.D. 06-29-2013 08:49 PM

Im a soldier, snackin on ambrosia sippin chamomile tea
The stone bolus that choked Cronus, dressed to kill in silk sheets
A Golem who slips his toes in penny loafers which sell for Gs
Grippin golden guns, the chosen one aiming to defy guilt with greed
I breathe with fruited breath more than diabetics who forget
Extract cyanide thru their stems to utilize in the most abusive sense
on come back for revenge with crueler intents than Lazarus events
when actual doom impends, I star trek with kombayshi maroon defense
I never brood regret, rather lose my head and lie in a grave
Stack riches, mac bitches, out to get it because a crime always pays
A modern day Goliath and Dave that’s combined in one frame
Who’s a stone’s throw away from a giant when my prides in the way

Fig 06-30-2013 03:42 PM

Clitoral flicking these competitor bitches. It's
literally illiterate litter bins filled to brim with shit.
Pride pillaged from those in their prime killing
they time with the lie their pinnacle matches my shit precision pitched.
Witness a frankenstein when the lightning strike, Im alive again
To blindly enter fights like Leviathen slammin heinekens.
After, dip in drippin wet princesses stripped of innocence
When it cums to burning rubber, her landing strip caught the jist of it.
Audi peelin, shotty wielding. Hair matching fabios
Got half a chub in the pant with your aunt screaming out, damelo!
A kracken get crackin rampant like crackheads and acid tablets
The magical addict traffick that get lost in a labyrinth package

Rawn M.D. 07-03-2013 10:58 PM

Upn for votes

Coup 07-06-2013 01:58 AM

Rawn-

again flow was coiled up and untangled off the tongue...good spits. some creative lines in this

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A Golem who slips his toes in penny loafers which sell for Gs
Grippin golden guns, the chosen one aiming to defy guilt with greed
ridiculous. funny. word


Quote:

I breathe with fruited breath more than diabetics who forget
Extract cyanide thru their stems to utilize in the most abusive sense
harsh..but word

Quote:

on come back for revenge with crueler intents than Lazarus events
when actual doom impends, I star trek with kombayshi maroon defense
I never brood regret, rather lose my head and lie in a grave
Stack riches, mac bitches, out to get it because a crime always pays
A modern day Goliath and Dave that’s combined in one frame
Who’s a stone’s throw away from a giant when my prides in the way

what's kombayshi, that hot dog eating cat ? lol

very nice closer yo
//

Figurative- your flow was hot too, though more of a choppa cadence, still a nice contrast to Rawn's more fluid delvery too. good looks on that all day long...

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Clitoral flicking these competitor bitches. It's
literally illiterate litter bins filled to brim with shit.
nice tounge twisting, but the end of bar two paid off rather weak with the lone "shit" end rhyme finisher...not a diss. just an observation.

Quote:

Pride pillaged from those in their prime killing
they time with the lie their pinnacle matches my shit precision pitched
not sure what ya gettin' on, but I feel the cadence yo..

Quote:

Witness a frankenstein when the lightning strike, Im alive again
To blindly enter fights like Leviathen slammin heinekens.
lol I feel you

Quote:

After, dip in drippin wet princesses stripped of innocence
When it cums to burning rubber, her landing strip caught the jist of it.
nice lol




Tbh, Rawn had depth of expression, ranging all over the place, opposed to Fig's sex appeal montra, though not bad, I give this one to

v/Rawn


good read from both

good luck y'all

Atomic 07-06-2013 06:02 AM

Extract cyanide thru their stems to utilize in the most abusive sense
on come back for revenge with crueler intents than Lazarus events
when actual doom impends, I star trek with kombayshi maroon defense

A modern day Goliath and Dave that’s combined in one frame
Who’s a stone’s throw away from a giant when my prides in the way

^dope flow. felt the content w/ those top 3 lines the most out of anything in your verse. also liked that final line thought that stones throw away/prides in the way was pretty dope inner rhyming/content as-well. based on that, the swag was also clearly on point.

To blindly enter fights like Leviathen slammin heinekens.
After, dip in drippin wet princesses stripped of innocence
When it cums to burning rubber, her landing strip caught the jist of it.

those lines were nice, felt the swag heavy in the first one, & i thought caught the jist of it was nice, even though you did throw in a cum/come which is somewhat unheard of/should not be used. still, regardless i felt it.

honestly, fig, i was not feeling the first few bars in your verse flow/swag wise, they just didn't piece well together for me, seemed a bit choppy.

overall, for consistency's sake & overall content/swag/flow i'll give it to rawn who edged swag & content & took flow for me quite easily due to figs first few bars.

v/ rawn, edges it

Sharp 07-06-2013 01:27 PM

Rawn had it for me flow wise. Fig was on point but I found rawness to be a little cleaner with flow. Swagger was dead even, stone throw being lorn but fig having leviathan and landing strip as a near quotable. So rawness got it for me with just a lil cleaner flow but this was dope guys.

V/rawn

Just Write 07-10-2013 11:37 AM

The stone bolus that choked Cronus, dressed to kill in silk sheets
A Golem who slips his toes in penny loafers which sell for Gs

on come back for revenge with crueler intents than Lazarus events
when actual doom impends, I star trek with kombayshi maroon defense

I never brood regret, rather lose my head and lie in a grave
Stack riches, mac bitches, out to get it because a crime always pays
A modern day Goliath and Dave that’s combined in one frame
Who’s a stone’s throw away from a giant when my prides in the way

vs.

Witness a frankenstein when the lightning strike, Im alive again
To blindly enter fights like Leviathen slammin heinekens.
After, dip in drippin wet princesses stripped of innocence
When it cums to burning rubber, her landing strip caught the jist of it.


A kracken get crackin rampant like crackheads and acid tablets
The magical addict traffick that get lost in a labyrinth package


both had some pretty nice lines, some crack up moments but i felt that figs was just a little too choppy and rawns was more fluid so i could kinda get into it more. as far as content i enjoyed both.

rawn edged this one though

Fig 07-10-2013 12:23 PM

Rawn wins it. Nice job man. Mods close this please


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