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Battle Hymns 06-23-2013 01:16 AM

Nuts on your Chin
 
Random Bars:


I'm twisted off of blunts
when twistin niggas head off for stunts
for bein pussy, I'ma ravage cunts
see tha kids come around when tha gun's cocked
like puffy, I can't and won't stop,
thinkin your safe because your homes locked?
till I kick in tha door wit a dome shot
before you phone cops, in a low tone, shocked,
saying no no no, --pop--, when Im goin solo, ock
so you're holdin no spot, just foldin on tha spot
like futons when this fools bombed and he's on tha news
n' his mom has no clue showing tha live reaction
cuz I'm tha live reaction when taking action
i've taken factions and rape them till they're fractions
so don't ask what happen when I'm rappin and start attackin
cuz I blacked out wit tha gat out as soon as you act out




watch tha trajectory..cuz I dissect sets wit twin secs ta see
who will die by my ecstasy so don't stand next ta me, tha Ill mc
none of you can come close ta killin me, willingly committin atrocities
war is my canvas to display my animosity, straight savage wit tha pen
You... are average and like to pretend, while I ravage and ascend
cuz Ima maverick who offends.. it's a means to an end
and an end which will mean I'm taking away triple beam dreams

I'm slick wit words, splittin vocal chords wit swords,
running wit hords, who pray to tha lord as they slay herbs,
who exchanged words not knowing they're talking to death
and are about to take their last breath, when they step
into your direction and act on natures natural selection

Atomic 06-23-2013 01:22 AM

LMFAO..... please never enter one of my battles ever again

Battle Hymns 06-23-2013 01:23 AM

Set up a match and get that ass spanked

Atomic 06-23-2013 01:24 AM

are you openly gay or something?

Battle Hymns 06-23-2013 01:25 AM

I'm not... But what's wrong with being gay?

Are you a xenophobic, bible thumper, biyatch?

Advocate 06-23-2013 01:26 AM

Not bad, for the most part I really liked it. Thought the content wise pretty simple, at the same time, what made your first verse interestin was how you were able to form a sequence of events to make a statement. It had a good rhythm to it tho, if anything try to add some more punchlines, not too many tho. But have enough to make it stand out from just your average everyday rhyme. All in all, wasn't a bad drop. Keep writing, and nice work!

Geno 06-23-2013 10:54 AM

Need work puting rhymes together in a more tightly knit fashion. Not bad for an opener to the site. Glad your here,, keep reading/responding and writing and ull elevate quickly at this site. Guaranteed.

Battle Hymns 06-23-2013 07:14 PM

Thanks...

Any more people want to say anything or kat caught your tongue? : )


@ Advocate, I'll be hollering at you soon

Advocate 06-23-2013 07:25 PM

Aite then son, hold it down.

Battle Hymns 06-24-2013 07:33 PM

55 views and only 2 responses.. lmfao its easy to piss you guys off

Minds 06-24-2013 10:52 PM

If it truly was random off the top then not bad. Good flow for the most part some okay lines but definitely random ha!


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