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Geno 06-16-2013 03:44 PM

happy fucking fathers day
 
Inside still aint rite, something keeps fuckin with gen
That's why the beautiful truth's about to get ugly again
The sun is in set mode and im restless as hell, rest didn't help
And I dont plan on telling anyone, unless its myself
Recording sessions of my privacy to witness my life, christ
And I keep talking to my roommates that I didn't invite
There invisible like, transparent or fucking gone with the wind
Crossing the bridge, like next time I'm driving rite off of this bitch!
horrible shit, fathers day, I just got back from my kids and Im home
Talking to her like I'm nuts, cause she don't even live with me though!
This fucking shit is a joke, and I ain't no where near laughin it off
Tryin to gain her mothers friendship when her stupid ass is a loss!
I'm just trapped in the thoughts, that maybe it'll change for the better
Daughter asked me and her mom to get along in her fathers day letter
She's gotten incredibly wise and she's totally young..
Learning more shit from her parents then we notice she does
A rollercoaster of emotions becomes the theme park of my life
Going from sad to pissed off makes me too exhausted to write
The caffiene I drank had me lost in the hype, but the feeling is gone
Hurting inside, convincing myself I'm fucking healing is all
Will someone turn the fucking helium off, or is a frog in my throat?
Or am I just about to collapse, or am I sort of already broke
Fuck these stupid ass questions man, you already know
Just grab the keys, well hit that bridge where we started to go
Fuck it

Rawn M.D. 06-16-2013 04:07 PM

pretty dope...felt the emotion.
flow was effortless, i think i MAYBE caught 1 hiccup...
literary device was i like ur word correlation helium/frog in throat that type of sht
but this was more a vent i feel, bc what i take away is more emotion than anything else...
glad u got it off ur chest...
keep writing.

oats 06-16-2013 04:41 PM

Another example or why you're one of the writers I make a point to read. You always strike a balance between deep emotional content and accessible articulation of it, which is hard to do. Almost Guru-esque? Your shit resonates with a lot of people because of it, and that's no easy feat. Keep posting.

Eŋg 06-23-2013 12:11 AM

I thought this was dope.

Geno 05-16-2014 02:36 PM

yessssssssssss. fuck bitches


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