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Frank 06-08-2014 12:22 AM

O.D
 
They say we die twice... Once when the breathe leaves our body and once when the last person we know says our name.




Close your eyes and feel that fucking rush that everybody's talking about...
Yeah it's a ten dollar high but I got these hundred million dollar coffins picked out -
You ever been cordially invited to a coroners couch???
Sat across from somebody that-had-that-look like they about ta snap?
& everybody laughs and the tension cracks like A lumberjack axe sawing in half, hogs in the back,
in the back of the torturers house....?
You ever walk past morgues in your town with a sword & a smile,
pacing back and forth with a frown?
Waiting for the first person to turn the corner and BLOAH!!!!!!
You ever drove around with a corpse in your porsche with your top down listening to Pac while
The law puts strips down and you spin out - get out - and POP!POW!
Your pulse is now... Wow............
187 beats per second...........
You're having a cow - now settle down, I'm going to grab a fork and a towel -
Gorge on the scowl - black out. get lost and then found
Absorb enormous amounts of Xylazine from the horses carroll
You ever looked into-a scorners eyes with adoring moral ,
And saw evil forming inside their corneas cloud?
-You ever saw a child drawing chalk around-yellow tape enforcing a crowd?
jump roping in front of the hounds on the playground on Dr. Kevorkians grounds?
You ever hung upside down off the cross while the warden was bound? ????
Took a tour of New York's poor in impound -
Smell hell - let the sulfur surround - open the door to it now -
We're in the underbelly of the sword swallowers mouth being coerced in the dose;
This is a recording from the walkie-talkies accounts; endorsing your oust
I over dosed, holy ghost. launched to a trounce...
At the gate way, where, drugs get you across unannounced.



- The Most Shady Franky Baby

Zen 06-08-2014 12:29 AM

You ever walk past morgues in your town with a sword & a smile,
pacing back and forth with a frown?
Waiting for the first person to turn the corner and BLOAH!!!!!!
^Cool beans.

The Kavorkian line was cool too but it could use a little rewording. This was cool though.

dead man 06-08-2014 10:11 PM

You ever looked into-a scorners eyes with adoring moral ,
And saw evil forming inside their corneas cloud?

Took a tour of New York's poor in impound -
Smell hell - let the sulfur surround

dope. felt like you took us on a momentary tour through your creative process. your city your state of mind your drugs

some gems a couple slow areas but the rhyming was always interesting in it's frankness.

thanks

The youngest boss. 06-09-2014 12:37 AM

Nah

dead man 06-09-2014 01:11 AM

Your pulse is now... Wow............
187 beats per second...........

Geno 06-10-2014 01:17 PM

i really liked this man. short and sweet.
a lot of dope qoutables, of course.

rather dark of you at some points. darker than norm imo. i dig it

Dope girl 06-10-2014 04:36 PM

wow this is dope of out the others, you some cool multies.

Frank 06-14-2014 05:07 PM

Goodlooks^

Kin 06-14-2014 05:23 PM

You ever been cordially invited to a coroners couch???
haha---crazy wording and imagery

You ever walk past morgues in your town with a sword & a smile,
^again...dope

Absorb enormous amounts of Xylazine from the horses carroll
You ever looked into-a scorners eyes with adoring moral ,
And saw evil forming inside their corneas cloud?
-whoa!...

shits all sick...like how it flowed...

Good work

HoLLa


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