Netcees

Netcees (http://netcees.org/index.php)
-   Open Mic Section (http://netcees.org/forumdisplay.php?f=6)
-   -   digital orgasm, plz (http://netcees.org/showthread.php?t=7369)

Vulgar 06-10-2013 02:58 AM

digital orgasm, plz
 
o

Geno 06-10-2013 07:07 PM

This piece is flooded with fucking lol qoutables

john malkovich’s serious face worn like a masquerade helmet

ran an aerialtrain on her til she was moaning ‘taxi!’ to the skies

harbinger academy - daughter of the macabees "ill go down on you, mr. robot but it’ll cost a dollar for the battered knees”

^ill as fuck btw.

Has more qoutables but grapped those off the top. Nice drop vulgar, always a refreshingthread from you.


Atr

Objective 06-11-2013 03:27 PM

Dope drop as always Vulgar. Fuled with metaphores, rich language, humor and amazing descriptions along with a easy to follow flow and rhymescheme. The opening four lines was dope as fuck. Great storytelling from beginning to end. Probably among the best pieces I've read from you imo.

Keep it up.

Joel Venom 06-11-2013 05:39 PM

keep it up vulgar, your still a beast

Rawn M.D. 06-12-2013 01:28 PM

lol entertaining...and ur wordchoice was dope af
sometimes i feel ur style gets to fragmented, but although some fragmentation, and change of tenses did occur, itself remained themed, and those breaks were of true creative license imo, so it still worked...
but things like 'operatic oganism and conduit cabage...and octopus krav maga, matinee menance, cabranet welches' are fuckin dope word choices/combinaations...adjective noun choices were dope and the highlight of the pc for me...
i did enjoy this, and felt it to be one of ur better drops that i've read...and u deff have ur own style that u clearly owned here..
btw flow was pretty much fluid for me, along with the scheming.
way to stay true to ur name.
dope, vulgar.

Mr. J 06-14-2013 11:30 AM

This was a nice piece all around, I feel your vocab is a great attachment
but at times when you fit all the syllables into the piece..and then throw a comma here
a period there, it kind of tosses me off, strictly based off the extra usage of words
other than that you really drew me in with the whole idea of this piece
you still have that touch....to be honest....I enjoyed the names w/ miscellanous items
nice drop though...keep writing

Eviscerate 06-14-2013 11:50 AM

this fucked up my head :O

dont even know how to properly respond right now.

Vulgar 07-03-2013 12:45 AM

Thanks for the feedback, all. Last up.

Eŋg 07-03-2013 04:00 PM

i honestly think, if writing is a reflection of its author, that you are borderline insane. i mean this was crazy, for what it was. and then objectively quite mad, too. your lexical base is respectably vast, and arguably overdone in execution... but that's entirely you, and your style. verbosity is/can be a double -edged sword, in my humble opinion, but it embodies the structural, inexorable resilience you pen with... it allows creation of these obscure threads of polysyllabic congruence, while the core of your writing is an unassailable non-sense so confident in its poise, it begins to convince you it's intelligible. it's equal parts mesmerizing and repulsive. do you take (many) drugs? i believe i caught the gist of this piece, it comes in peace, tongue-in-cheek, on the rotating kebab skewer sitting a perfect equidistance between Angels and Demons, on the spectrum of causation. or something. shout outs to butter pecan Rican, ofc.

in summation: i liked it, you off-key banana bastard.

MACCABEES

hit me back, i've only got one thread up.

pz.

Coup 07-03-2013 10:23 PM

Laitin vulgate...let's colab on some Shakespeare abstracitcus some time


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 09:28 PM.

Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.5
Copyright ©2000 - 2025, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
User Alert System provided by Advanced User Tagging (Lite) - vBulletin Mods & Addons Copyright © 2025 DragonByte Technologies Ltd.