Smokin kush in flying carpet
 

God rap wearing halo's as tophats
Rollgrass mary poledancin, on pottracks
Rappin' superbot, smoking harry's pot
Turned my craft to a witchcraft, married hiphop
Liplock, tongue action spittin magic
Pen tactics, can't imagine, living addict
Scribbling till I losed a fraction of a bone fragment
I keep myself awake with hanging cold magnets
Gotta keep my head up, faggets know my domes a weapon!
So if my drive comes by go low as your hoes profession
as for now i'm uninsipired so you can have that summer match
But know if i was to buck 1 tire chances of a comeback
would be that of negative do the math after this aftermath
I'm leaving instruments, genius,master rap

This was pretty cool I dug the little flow you had going on
it seemed to lack a bit of flavor for me...the taste wasn't for me
maybe towards the middle I felt that was when you caught on
nice little drol..I believe I've seen better

liked this a lot more than what you've put up in the past.

Do yourself though homie. u've showed you can flow/ arrange syllables, now do your thing with it

Spread them wings feel me?

Appreciate guys.

This was erratic and each time you brought up a context or subject you abandoned it, leaving this feeling rushed and confused.

Like you bring up God, then the next line Harry Potter's weed (really ? is Harr'ys weed that dank ?) lol...only to abandon those to subs to create more undeveloped themes....

I liked the stagger, short flow and presentation, the strong suit of this piece. But with something this choppy (not ness. a bad thing) you really need to glue it together with a strong theme and context that does not abandon ideas in every line...na mean ?

So walking away from reading this I just get a small glimpse that you are a bad-ass ? How so ? I got to believe it, not just read it.


Take this as crit.

Theres is a content. the content is i'm smoking weed to write better and I write alot.

I aint trying to be the lemon here, but that escaped me and it's not my fault.

God rap wearing halo's as tophats
Rollgrass mary poledancin, on pottracks
Rappin' superbot, smoking harry's pot
Turned my craft to a witchcraft, married hiphop
Liplock, tongue action spittin magic
Pen tactics, can't imagine, living addict

to the whole harrys pot was a lol metaphor on how weed makes me spit magical and instead of
perfecting a craft i'm perfecting a witch craft.

then the other lines were just about how i'm am addict of writting.

I see you.

I like how you spice up verse, it was cool. I enjoyed reading
this more than others.

Beautiful u gotta tell me do you or dont have mental disability this is what sini keepz pming me

On some srs sht .