Bored af
 

Ima niggerish spic with a lyricsts wit
Plus I never give shits
So u know I'm finna blow like a finished lit wick
No RnR, I am so Orenthal...
I could write the book about killin this bitch
Are you gettin this shit?
Im A skilled freak monster coming off of the dome
A real g, mobster, yet never walked w/ the chrome
But don't get it twisted like contortionist bones
Fuckn w/ me ain't flirtn w/ death homey, u offering dome

This verse reminds me of just a bunch of dudes spitting freestyles on a corner. It was good when I pictured it like that but when comparing this to the other more well thought out verses it pales in comparison. My advice would be to read a few guys stuff and get a feel for the styles used here and then take your time on a verse. Stay active. Peace.

Actually not bad at all. Content was pretty standard and basic, the vocab was extremely simple.. and overall it was too short. On second thought, I guess this sucks then. There was elements I liked though.


"Im A skilled freak monster coming off of the dome
A real g, mobster, yet never walked w/ the chrome"

^That for example. I think mainly because of the whole bar flowing

Thanks for the feedback. I focused more on flow for this cuz It's a song I'm working on.

dude this is pretty dope. Scheme wise, it's pretty good, but what's really great about this is how effortless it seems.

thanks homey, there's more to it but I just put what I thought was the best part, still a work in progress.

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