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Just Write 05-15-2013 09:39 PM

quick 12
 
Not a slave to opposition, watch me slay the competition/
Those who lame n talkin shit get dropped n tossed inside a lake to swim with fishes/
You the fakest type of bitches catch a fade with razor blades n pistols/
Im amazing plain and simple, attractin dames w thick frames and major dimples/
I spit game n blame my issues on mistakes ive claimed to make me "miss you"/
Till the bitch sucks me off with no condom on with edible lube n lots of tissue/
The devilish dude to all you christians, ive brought the clues that you've been missin/
Nothings true you're all in prison, in your mind's the proof but only you can find the fiction/
With rhymes i might be gifted, just wait if i get time to write and go the distance/
I might explode and blow existence into a black hole from these prose and showy lipids/
colder then costco's frozen lockers, smooth as liquid, hotter than the hole where satans pitted/
It's just jokes im only kiddin but this kid is known to flow exquisite and you know he knows his business/



Out bitches.

Fig 05-15-2013 10:24 PM

Aye, like how you kept the rhyme scheme consistent here, it was illin. The only gripe for me is that some of these lines feel like run on sentences and I cant find the flow. The first two lines are the best example of that. Either way, decent flex

Quote:

The devilish dude to all you christians, ive brought the clues that you've been missin/
Nothings true you're all in prison, in your mind's the proof but only you can find the fiction/
^^^tight

Dove Dozer 05-15-2013 10:30 PM

This was pretty nice man. Some nice syllables too bruh.. same as fig said though some lines seemed long so i lost the flow. But that could depend on your delivery with it. So its kinda subjective. Dope... regardless from the hardest artists.. hoorah

Just Write 05-15-2013 10:44 PM

Lol yea when i spit its rapid fire so you gotta read faster ahaha.. Good lookin on the feed. Drop some links n ill return the favor

Fig 05-15-2013 10:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Just Write (Post 59348)
Lol yea when i spit its rapid fire so you gotta read faster ahaha.. Good lookin on the feed. Drop some links n ill return the favor

Dont mind if I do...

http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=6412

EndSane 05-16-2013 12:05 AM

This was dope...nothing like mind blowing but as for a steady dose of Multies and flow this was dope...I thought it was spot on and I read it pretty quick...I read it twice cause I had a couple hiccups with it because the lines were a little long like people said previously...


Maybe just add some more subject matter next time...I have no qualms with it because I like these little flexes and think it helps u as an overall rapper...this was some good shit and like to see more

Just Write 05-16-2013 01:19 AM

I got you fig, and endsane i feel it, im gunna format this how i pause n shit and yea this was a spurt of boredom type thing i did at work. Ima make a more content filled piece next time, i you want something fed drop a link and ill hit it up when i get figs


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