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Breh321 05-11-2013 08:37 PM

Trying something different
 
Im the Worst rapper, the last of the sket blaster
Purse snatchers never will worry the chess master

Straight up and down I'm sideways on my crook shit
Break off the crown the castle is never hassled stick to highways on my rook shit
Bishop in it wit a wicked grimace
Slashing through defenses injured opponentsll never win it
At night get crafty
nobodyll ever catch me/shells
Start dumpin cousin
those who stick to honor always stay takin Ls (knights...honor...L shape movement, im sure everyone got that but my vanity in my "cleverness" makes me want to highlight this lol)
Bitchniggas throw around secrets with confidantes
Till they get crossed over these pawns hit wit an en pasant
Still I /stay clean/the king ain't gotta move
My Queen handle the dirty work/she the real power they never knew

So I stick back/chillin in my fortress
A mansion expanding built off others' corpses
An arsenal and and infantry don't ever try to test him
Built for it mentally essentially they never will check him
But as the plot thickens they pieces start to come up missing
Block pitchin pigeons realizing that this is just a scrimmage
Start feeling inflictions/the pain/they were trying to detonate
Upon others the broad covers get lifted up from under them at the end of the checkmate

Game over.

"/" -voice pauses but not necessarily end of the rhyme

Fig 05-11-2013 09:14 PM

Quote:

Bishop in it wit a wicked grimace
Slashing through defenses injured opponentsll never win it
lol, some nice wording in here. That last section was especially nice

Quote:

So I stick back/chillin in my fortress
A mansion expanding built off others' corpses
An arsenal and and infantry don't ever try to test him
Built for it mentally essentially they never will check him
I see you man

Breh321 05-13-2013 07:33 PM

haha thanks man, appreciate the appreciation

normally i dont really sit down and write about a concept for a long time, so it was hard to stick to this one topic

Mr. J 05-13-2013 10:25 PM

This was actually pretty dope, I always enjoyed Chess references
I always felt that the best person to Chess references was....Gza
forgot what the track was called but I really enjoyed the piece my dude
it was a nice drop to say the least...keep working on it though man
I can't wait to read more

Zen 05-14-2013 01:18 PM

I agree this was pretty nice. Kinda had me chuckling in a good way at a few parts like the taking L's line. This is nice seeing a conceptual drop from you. Out of the influx of new people you just might be the most promising stay up man.

UnoQuattroThres 05-15-2013 05:53 AM

This is some RZA chess masters flow here, even come off a little wu tangish...that's not a bad thing...crazy multies and metas. nice drop...


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