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Stop me........if you heard this one
Therapy is scaring me...the thought alone left...
gotta go...stressed, I topple whole decks moniter my moniker before you offer your help heated with a thermometer, a nautical belt a knife to slice your head and leave it properly shelfed I oughta be locked up, strapped down and kicked like I need much room, I keep caps round to hit I'll knock your knee caps down a tick... have your hourly rate describing your true wages best bet you won't make sense even with 2 faces pardon me the garden needs tending minds need bending as we hit another dead end it's no crash test....dummy, its all enigma that's why I got em backed down like a cherry picker pick and roll you gotta man up for this defense I fell a bit off the deep end...puffing on leaf ends... dusting off my suit from the fall off the top bathing in my own shit, going crazy at the aqua duct |
Good short piece here. Favorite line was the moniker line. I did feel it fell off though as you used to many 'ends' rhymes. I don't like reading the same word in a rhyme over and over. Idk maybe that's just me. But all in all good piece man. Keep droppin.
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heated with a thermometer, a nautical belt <- didnt get that line but other than that good shit
very distorted imagery, which im guessin is what you were going for with the whole therapy thing? |
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either way thanks bro...:D |
damn just got that, good shit
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I love this joint, full of energy & stick with topic.
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Therapy is scaring me...the thought alone left...
gotta go...stressed, I topple whole decks moniter my moniker before you offer your help heated with a thermometer, a nautical belt a knife to slice your head and leave it properly shelfed the start of this is right sick!, short and sweet. paints a good picture good flow nice multi's I was def. liking this verse 7.5/10 |
I think this was a good rhyming excercise. You definitely have a cool style....but i can't say a whole it didn't seem to have any other aim besides rhyming.
Maby its over my head idk but either way thats my two cents Maby try a topical next |
Good for a flex. Not much I could cling to for a qoute.
Had some lines I enjoyed though. Couple concepts I thought coulda been flipped a little better. Definitely a strong base to build on. Keep dropping, ill be watching for more |
nice little flex piece here. u new around these parts? where did u come from? anyway yea the rhyming was nice and seemed effortless. moniker line was slick. some good lines scattere thruout. wish it was longer really. keep writing!
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Oh I'm sure you'll remember once I drop a topical
thanks for the feed though fellas |
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