A Passionate Climb. Trap & Geno
 

Trap..
they say silence is golden but i'm speaking my mind
& giving sight to the blind w/ every weakness i find
i'm violent by design like jmt in their prime
yet my passionate climb enacts my reason for rhyme
lord, give me a sign or i'm asking for why
you let the good die young and keep the evil alive
through the youth's mischievious eyes pries a realized message
too many answers & questions yet a change is a vestige
the essence, an exodus from life's near struggle
weight on our shoulders soon turns to mere rubble
lovers to friends or friends to lovers, a full-circle erupts
but let's hope the radius ain't playin' us..

Geno..
Or the equation is wrong, the vicious cycle revolves
To much temptation in your life for you to rite any wrongs
Despite any faults you may have owned up to at times
Doing what you had to do during the hustle, the grind
Your dedicated muscular drive, never fucking subsides
Surprise, the good intentions you ignored, all one at a time
Denied, its alive, the devil inside tearing aquaintences up
Abrupt, Hiding behind its failed image of the angel it was
Ur patron saints are in luck, cause u've been praying for once
Its hell on earth, and your whole is just a cave in the crust
A crater, a dump, a dust filled vacant place for your soul
if you don't change then it becomes your destination, ur home

This was dope forreal. I wish this shit was longer from both of ya'll though. Ya'lls styles mixed well with each other.
through the youth's mischievious eyes pries a realized message
too many answers & questions yet a change is a vestige
the essence, an exodus from life's near struggle
weight on our shoulders soon turns to mere rubble
^^Very well said. Dope.
Trap I've never read anything from you I don't think but I like your style man. You got nice multis and a very consistent flow. There were no hiccups in your verse. Nice.
Surprise, the good intentions you ignored, all one at a time
Denied, its alive, the devil inside tearing aquaintences up
Abrupt, Hiding behind its failed image of the angel it was
Ur patron saints are in luck, cause u've been praying for once
Its hell on earth, and your whole is just a cave in the crust
^^That's that raw Geno shit right there.
This was vintage Geno. You got one of the most recognizable styles on this whole fuckin site and this verse didn't disappoint. Excellent flow and excellent content.
All in all both of you dropped two great pieces. Maybe next time drop longer verses lol. Props you two.

dope verse geno. we vibed off each other well. kind've had similar styles for this verse too.

ya this was pretty dope. you guys had the same style going definitely. using a lot of one syllable words as the rhymes. stayed away from multis from the most part. its not easy to make words like find, mind, rhyme, prime sound not basic but you guys did that here so ya cool shit. the content was nice too. good drop

Trap:
The positive here is it is mechanically sound and on point. Solid schemes and it definitely had style to it. Alot of people(imo) have trouble with giving there writing character and you did that here, props. The negative here is it is on the basic side vocabulary wise. I mean not every drop has to be filled with big words, but as a personal challenge...when youve already mastered certain words its appropriate and will help you elevate when you up your vocabulary.
Just a suggestion...do you though. Nice verse.

(And btw i also tend to use basic words and would probably take that advice myself)

Geno:
I'm assuming you being the second verse you were trying to mesh with his level of writing. You did so well. Again another mechanically sound verse and like traps flow was on point.
As a matter of fact, i'm not sure if ive ever seen you mess flow up drastically lol.
One thing i notice about you and your writings having read your ish for a long time is they are becoming similar in style. I mean its great when you've mastered a certain way to write but i think it would be a refreshingly nice surprise to read something far from your norm. Something nobody would even expect from you. You have alot of talent and there are literally hundreds of different ways to scheme. I say experiment.
Hopefully ya'll don't take it as hate. I mean it to help.
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Preciate the feed natty

I feel you yo, maybe ill drop some real unexpected shit in one of my next verses.

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