TYSON vs SPLIT (Topical battle) - SPLIT WINS
 

Topic...."Vanity and pride are different things, though the words are often used synonymously"

No line limit. Due Tuesday.

@Split

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EDIT: I'm using my 30 vote surplus from the AOWL to keep this open til I can vote after finals

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@Split so I quess u want an extension. Granted.

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=5969
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=5575

Duck duck

@Split. U a bitch son.

Pride Catches Up With Vanity Over Drinks
 

reunions, dressed to impress.
yet it was you I didn't expect, Gucci dress,
woozy. I'm speechless just to see you again,
not sure where we left it at, thirties versus twenty-so
Flashbulb memory moat, recurring dream when she slowly spoke


"Shit...
cleaned yourself up, huh?

assured in that identity. courtesy of Hennessy-
or your better salary made laxity your enemy.
italian suit- flashy gold threads ringin round that neck,
a dividend of that woulda written cost of living checks-
y'know, when you and me last met, crumpled cash instead of plastic,
laughed with when getting laughed at, found pretty sexy and not aesthetic,
getting shitty wasn't drunken, just expressive, compulsive, in essence,
functioning fuck-ups at best, sunk into lust from every ugly life lesson,
lecture notes discarded despite messages scarred in collagen.
feels like now we've never stopped cohabitation,
shot glasses reminiscent of goblets of graduation.

when our living arrangement stopped."

not a guilt wash, just surprise got me tongue tied.
realize these knots I never quite decided to untie
I...

'look... love is not a contract for a constant state.
it's a process. Obstient concrete steps: no slipping, pause or wait,
it's the god, tides, omnipotent ocean steeps in cold old age,
an experience- photos you save, not its shards like artifacts.
I never left you know, when paths split, just too hard to start back
still gaze at horizons whose rays burn, but light fades
it was the right way, but still- I'm sorry if this is late..'

eyes down. nothing to dissect,
ghost town, empty of regret.

"there's no opposing change. a component of travel.
hey, turn away the sun, you live in your own shadow.
tomorrow living's lavish but the pathos is shallow-
Sad, you hold wealth like a mattress in a holding cell.
and I'm dressed as nice, but the difference I can tell-
We discussed what we miss, I focus on what was,
While you only talk about us, and yourself"

and the vainest thing I ever did
was drink in silence and pretend we didnt

My term

Me myself and I... clean dressed with tie
Free to progress with time but seen as the best in line
Sinners confess they crimes while gods dine, sipping from holy grails
Immortals with a time limit celebrating as our goals prevail
Dark souls but my skin is pale yet no transparency
Wat the parents see is the savior, smiles glaring caringly
The strute in my steps are finessed with assertive cockiness
Impression of rocky's fist hurled at politics freeing the souls locked in it
Family first cements my foundation anything else is preposterous lies
They enjoy their lobster dish fine I just prefer to acknowledge the wine
Intoxicated by the taste.. its just a added bonus
My taboo lust for cashews that i hide by showing them almonds
Undignified relations with my slutty tittyfied patients
Grew a fungus of jealous infecting the unified nation
Subjected to sructuny... a mutiny of the masses
My positive ramifications thru term where overran by the impunity of my actions
Should of never shared my bounty with my peers
Colleagues I've known for years. Held hidden agendas behind our cheers
Parallel to my reign lies undignified I pursued
My pride showed great promise till vanity decided to protruded

Chyeahh vs lotto
Pic Title match

UP

Pls mark open for votes

"assured in that identity. courtesy of Hennessy-
or your better salary made laxity your enemy.
italian suit- flashy gold threads ringin round that neck,
a dividend of that woulda written cost of living checks-"

not sure how to judge battles like this, but i think split bodied tbh

could picture what he spit better than tyson's...seems like tyson was just focused more on using vocab/wordplay, but i like a well delivered story over the use of esoteric word usage...seemed like your message got lost in it

spits verse was more reader friendly even tho if u looked at the structures it wudn't be plain to the naked eye. the verse itself was nice and very imagery driven. took a tone of longing but being too good to go back to the old girl kinda vibe. i dig it and can dig it. tyson went down a totally different route and had some nice standout lines. overall tyson flowed and used his multies cleaner than split whos end rhymes are still one syllable (stop that). i think in terms of writing quality and making me feel more as a reader Split had the edge, so yea vote Split

2-0 UPPIN

Split wins close this @Defiant

I'm still gonna vote on this even if it is closed.

Split: Good writing here. It was kind of a long build up though that I felt kinda dragged in parts. The positives were it was poetic and kept me entertained.]
Tyson: You came with a good piece too. The negatives to your post really was that it was just too short for my taste. It needed more length to make a better story you know? But the positive was it was good writing man just not long enough to win.

V/Split