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I’ve got the greatest rhymes in history… Embrace the likes of bitch emcees
I’m taking bites as fatal as serrated knives equipped to teeth So intricate, you layman's need to say it twice to crisply read it See, ya mortal minds a peg beneath the gorgeous sight and force of lightning This war defines a fight between a dwarf and a giant and of course you’ll deny it When it comes to violence, I’m the foreman of fighting like I’m George in his prime To torture you, I’ll stick a fork in your side and grate your corpse into a fine meat that I portion and dine on, shit your organs and grind the manure to invite green My writing incites greed and karma, it’s the very flame thats speaking darkly The weed is sparkin, when the Mary Jane is in me like the heart of Peter Parker, I’m complete as Martians tryin to teach you artists that you’re basic as rain falling The way I squeak through your straight flaws I’m like paper to Dwayne Johnson Ya make dirt while I paint knowledge sang often by the sanctioned priests of Exodus You can’t brag or preach of powers, you’re a fragment piece of excellence Well E’s empowered, and my placement on the throne, I keep as evidence Excalibur-type greatness, being stoned was a prerequisite |
This is one of those instances where a paragraph format would've helped. And that third line about having to reread your lines was lols
because thats what I was doing as I read it :D good show. great word smithship |
idk if I'm convinced
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wow! very dope dude! the reason this is so good is because it sets you apart!
if copypat, wise ways, zygote, big baby, and neighbor were all to drop flex pieces this woudl definitely ring in there as "nigma". You should give this a shot as a practice to exercise rhymes. The one liners were cool, and the slight tongue twisting in the beginning was so rad. Id critique a bit; but theres so little to critique this inspired me to write something just like this bro and I just did check it out! |
ahahha yo mang. pretty sick.
peter parker and dwayne johnson name drops were dopes scheming was really sick, although i felt a few parts u slightly fucked up on. like u missed the proper sound in order to transition to a new scheme... it generally worked but could have been smoother, i think u know what i mean?? agree with fig, if this was paragraph i think it would have read better.. strangely enough. it had that feel to it for sure good to see u dropping man. i really liked reading this. i know u normally do topicals so this was cool to see i got a doozy coming. better peep it |
ty for feedsies :)
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Lol... I just dropped an SnF peice...
But yeh man.. it started off solid..but then ur structure got in the way of ur scheming it appeared like its almost if u just spaced it out wrong or something.. if u read it spaced diff, its cleaner...it may just b ur end rhymes tho, bc the scheming kind deviates a bit... it had a lot of potential, but u just went a little to abstract in some places.. def a good attempt tho. |
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^lmao Go read rawns swag and flow yo |
Thanks for your faggot post Rawn. Next time you take that tone with me I will SLIT YOUR FUCKING NECK
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Lmao...
Yo @Nigma its the end rhymes man.. lines like 3 to 6.. I kno u tried w the internals, but it just didnt go smooth as hoped It throws it...least 4 me, maybe im wrong, just the way i read it... =( |
I'm gonna give your face a freddie kruger fist fuck you flaming faggot
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