cheese puffs and scooby doo
 

I play baseball wit orphans on grass sponsored by orkin
Sportin sunglasses an cleats smokin weed ta kill boredom
tell em ta run home an laugh as the cry in confusion smh kids
relax its all allusions your delusional bitch!
Fuck the illusions, you ain't wanted its been proven in which
No matter how hard ya cry ya tears ain't improvin shit
The crest is heaven sent Creed is prevalent
An since greed is a sickness I'm bringing the medicine.
A little dose of reality bring the mallet ta me
Im the judge an executioner; jury just breeds fallacy, see!?
OJ went free while Micheal Jackson raped
Meanwhile r Kelly's hittin record on his video tapes.
So fuck it I mean luck aint doin shit for the poor
Ima kick in the doors of some whores get my dick sucked pay em for chores
Turn em around for more deplorable acts
Then smack em in the back of the head wit the hilt of an ax!
Don't question my motives notice I ain't losing my focus
Im curing stupidity wit an iron grip on emotions.
Common sense is uncommon commonly unused an forgotten
For God himself coulda used sense when he had his son killed That was rotten!
In all of our teachings preachers reached to the youth
About murder mayhem an mischief now look wats produced.
Cynical assholes critical of bashfulness, why!?
Because to live in this world is a sin...and in death we still lie.

Very nice, reminiscent of Hopsin in some ways, I like the use of the multis and how you take us from childhood into being in a disillusioned state. Some of it needed better connection but just as a "Whats in Creed's Mind" type of rhyme, this is pretty nice. Don't get the title though.. For a sec i thought it might be a Rihanna parody..

Cheesy puffs and Scooby Doo ... (but i'm still hungry)
Koolaid and mountain dew.... (goddamn im hungry)

lmao thanks man, i jus picked random shit for the title cuz it was 4 am an aint really give a fuck bout wat it was called

Leave links I'll rtf can't search for shit on mobile

tell em ta run home an laugh as the cry in confusion smh kids
relax its all allusions your delusional bitch!
^^I lol'd at this.
I liked this piece man. You seem to have a witty sense of humor and its refreshing as most OM pieces are serious. Instead you dropped some social commentary with a dab of humor behind it and that was refreshing. Tbh one line stuck out that I didn't like:
For God himself coulda used sense when he had his son killed That was rotten!
^^I see what you're saying there but it could have used better wording in my opinion but maybe that's just me lol.
All in all nice drop though man. Stay active and keep dropping.

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thanks man i'll rtf as soon as i get home from work

Bump?

maybe you should leave real feed on more than one piece before shamelessly self-upping all 3 of your drops

I fed like 4 other pieces before it got changed back to NCs sorry I got limited net an shitty phone an can't feed mass pieces. An na I only upped this one piece an only got one other drop at the bottom of the comin page. Wtf go somewhere wit your bullshit

Last bump. Feeding tomorrow