Thoughts of mine
 

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im never awake just a sentient shape of a humanoid
wasted in sessions i blaze till i lose my voice
they gesticulate im a lazy and stupid boy
just cos i graze in the haze with hugest joints
now its making me too annoyed
like playing your favourite tunes while you hate on my music choice!

so im expending my hatred and venting my rage
at my pallid reflection im met with disdain
my eyes are crimson yet empty and glazed
and cold as the wind in december that trembles your frame

my pen full of flames has evolved into a robot spy
cos everything i write on this site will get stolen by
soulless types with frozen hearts sittin on their thrones of ice
so everytime i hold a mic im feeling like they go to bite
with open wide mandibles, damaging like cobra strikes
so roll the dice and the play the game its fair to say you know the price..

Last part was crazy


Ur dope

surprised to see this, good shit. the rhyming was crisp, good rhythm to it, overall a nice 16

soulless types with frozen hearts sittin on their thrones of ice
so everytime i hold a mic im feeling like they go to bite
with open wide mandibles, damaging like cobra strikes
so roll the dice and the play the game its fair to say you know the price..

^^
I like that alot it had everything u needed for a closer

some vocab felt a little forced, a few grammar mistakes made a few lines awkward but overall the content was cool and was a solid piece