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fresh vs Just Write (Topical)- JW WINS BY DQ
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so thats the topic.
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Mines ready. Just waiting for you to post bud
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there once was a boy named just write
he tied his new shoes up tight today would be his first day in school he wanted all the kids to think he was cool unfortunetly they bullied him every day threw rocks at his head when he went over to play things went on like this for mostof his sorry life now he works in a factory makin plastic forks an knives one day JW got into a scuffle while out on his break a little kid made fun of him then punched him in the face it was unfortunate for JW that he cried his eys out because he cried so many tears he died after his organs dried out his funeral was pretty much empty only 4 people came there were no words but the 5 including the priest spit on his grave |
You'll never understand me, or the mistakes that i've made,
this life is demanding. such a frightening maze. Cheers to the bastards, plastered, hiding their pain As for me, i settle for brandy, then start drifting away. I use to be clever, use to be better, There was a time when i only toasted on my social endeavors, Now that my emotions are severed, I can't hold it together Cause I traded my passion, my family, for 40 ounces of pleasure Lately I can't even stand me, hopefully that relationship betters, But progression is lessened when you lack to put forth an effort. Pour me another glass and i'll pour out my soul. i have no where to go Gave up a happy home, for a bottle. a cardboard box on the side of the road Tallie the votes, im still the happiest drunk you could meet. At least until my alcohol count decreases and ceases to peak. So Each morning i wake up and drown myself with a bottle of wine Til i become man enough to put it down and swollow my pride. |
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Just Write: You actually wrote a good verse to the topic. I liked "Lately I can't even stand me." There were a few too many clichés. But it was good.
fresh: I don't know what that was. Vote: Just Write |
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you make a battle, you vote on two battles each. 4 votes total, usually enough to end a battle. at the moment the BA is slow with a tourney going on inside of it drawing most voters and knocking BA battles down. they are gone for the time being. just vote on two battles |
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=54898
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=51897 Here's 2 more votes to cover his sorry ass |
Fresh-Bars all over the place, Could have wrote a better verse if spend more time on it.
Vote-JW for batter attempts. |
Fresh
work on ur style and expanding ur lines..very basic stuff man read other topicals or writers and see how they use imagery and what not JW better verse clearly knows what he's doing MVGT Just Write |
Fresh came fresh. His verse was a social statement on the nature of topical verses. Each word danced with reverence in my mind
V/JW |
Just saw the verse haha.. This is pathetic
@Just Write Im just gonna give you the w here. I think this verse would better served in the OM, and hopefully the OM dudes would be cool with letting 2 of your votes count as links especially since I've taken OM feed as voting links(@certain ?). Sorry bout this boss Btw those 3rd/4th link are good if you're ever tryna topical battle here again, I only take 2 votes per person and if someone comes up short they get an extra loss |
why you keep deleting my vote? It was a perfectly valid vote!
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non bass playing motha fucka! I challenge you to a bass off!
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@namix, bro this is why he keeps getting fucked with. Shit like this
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Are you going to accept my bass challenge? We go down in history as first bass off in any rap battle site. Whatdya say? |
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