I got BARzzz..
 

check this out when ya'll can


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oewbY_zRngU

listened once

beat is thunder

your verse was uuhh...i warmed to it by the end

def wasnt feeling from the get go though, shits just too contrived....or rather thats how it comes off to me...that kids on the couch...simpsons intro...blaaah i got no love for that shits. i was fucking with it after that skinny jeans, tough to pull it off nigggaaaa...iunno why exactly though tbh lmfao you hate on a grown man with no plans suck a dick!!

blaaah

usual though, your flow clean as fuck, still not my thing, but it aint some shit i'd hear and be like 'turn that shits off'...

coool shit,

#1

WORD BRO thanks for the feedback honestly i love the constructive criticism it helps me work on more of my ish!

sounds like all the joel venom tracks i've heard. energy stuffed with words. i'd have to listen to this several times to catch a bulk of what you're saying. it's too early in the morning for this, lol.

clean and crispy though.

thanks for the honesty man lol let me know when your able to do that!

Didn't really like the vocal in the beat, it's kinda too loud or something so I can't really focus on what you're saying. Beside of that I thought it was dope and different, I enjoyed the flow and delivery. Cool shit Joel.

thanks man i been thought people weren't gonna comment and leave feedback on this lol

You don't stand above the beat well enough on this. Raising your vocals would be a big help, but I'm not sure you have enough vocal presence to make a beat like this work. The beat is really good. Your rap is pretty good, though a few of the punchlines were not great. You mixed up your flow well. It just doesn't all come together as well as it could.