The Cold.
 

Quadriplegics playing hot-cross Jesus
w/hop scotch genies, leap frogging demons
I'll eat your tots, teeter tottering thesis
Over a water logged allegiance of dry humor
Why you stare at my eye tumors? Wise loser
Nostrils can't catch the brute-ness I've fumed up
Remember us on your couch, mind's shroom-fucked
Nothing on, whilst our tongues down each other's tonsils
This is for the run-away points of a hundred convos
The war stricken environment of our beloved condo
Peep this chaos I'm melting in- day job of skeletons
Demoralizing oral hybrids hang off w/gelatin
Baller's blood boils to get the weight off then sell again
Tv clicker tour guiding our brain washed intelligence
My mind on vibrate as the skull shake
Was running outta steam then the cigs stole pace
Was going too slow to even pull brakes
Wasn't nothing to show for on this full plate
Whole weight nothing, Atlas, roll blades
Whole lot'a nothing going on behind this dull face
Been in this old cage, digging like mole caves
Don't matter what the toll say. Watch the coals blaze
As I burn bridges to stay warm on cold days
You must be retarded if you think I'ma fold ace
Garage shut- I like to sing
Rev the car up & die w/me,
..like the start of HotTub Time Machine
The stars just shine for me
I'm prank calling the hospital, insane golem
A-bombing as my Brain's thawing
Yo I hang-office space, talking in tank crossings
Blaze chronic in plane cock pits
This is to those Heath Ledgers trying to sleep better
The grief getters, scraping hearts on cheese shredders
Release setter, staining blood within each letter
At peace? Never.. This the cold.. Why you keep sweaters
The past? i pet it & nurture- blank out.. edited version
Lost my precious, that regrettable perfect
Can't even remember when my head isn't hurting
The moment our eyes touched was a special occurrence
Used to do shit to you while you slept like a medical surgeon

Love reading your stuff.

This was fire. Had an old school feel to it that reminded me of this guy Phade from back in the day on Rapflava.

"Was going too slow to even pull brakes
Wasn't nothing to show for on this full plate
Whole weight nothing, Atlas, roll blades
Whole lot'a nothing going on behind this dull face
Been in this old cage, digging like mole caves
Don't matter what the toll say. Watch the coals blaze
As I burn bridges to stay warm on cold days
You must be retarded if you think I'ma fold ace
Garage shut- I like to sing
Rev the car up & die w/me,
..like the start of HotTub Time Machine
The stars just shine for me
I'm prank calling the hospital, insane golem
A-bombing as my Brain's thawing
Yo I hang-office space, talking in tank crossings
Blaze chronic in plane cock pits
This is to those Heath Ledgers trying to sleep better
The grief getters, scraping hearts on cheese shredders
Release setter, staining blood within each letter
At peace? Never.. This the cold.. Why you keep sweaters
The past? i pet it & nurture- blank out.. edited version
Lost my precious, that regrettable perfect
Can't even remember when my head isn't hurting
The moment our eyes touched was a special occurrence
Used to do shit to you while you slept like a medical surgeon"

That whole part was nice! I bolded what impressed me most. Nice writing Wise.

holy shit son. killin it here. this was ridiculous, your lack of feeds is offensive! this is top notch shit. Your style is pretty unique. it feels very raw but i think its done like that on purpose, like not super polished like someone like lars or vulgar but just more emotion and realness to it. the complexity on this verse was alot higher than that first one i read, that made it infinitely more enjoyable to me. the end scheming was super sick with the medical surgeon rhyme.. outrageous!! . also this part stood out:

Peep this chaos I'm melting in- day job of skeletons
Demoralizing oral hybrids hang off w/gelatin
Baller's blood boils to get the weight off then sell again
Tv clicker tour guiding our brain washed intelligence


really really good drop here wize, fav thing ive read so far being on here

Wisington Ways still getting slept on in 2013?

It has a reflective quality that is great, perhaps many lines are exaggerated and hyperbole but there is every now and again that part of truth. You also show some humorous lines, E.g., "garage shut", "prank calling", "on couch". There is direct contrast to more serious lines E.g., the whole "sleep better" part. You reveal a strong multidimensional personality through these lines in combination.

reminds me of tame1 in a particular way. pulling random matter into pattern. rapidfire rhyme shadowbox

Over a water logged allegiance of dry humor
Why you stare at my eye tumors? Wise loser

Peep this chaos I'm melting in- day job of skeletons
Demoralizing oral hybrids hang off w/gelatin
Baller's blood boils to get the weight off then sell again
Tv clicker tour guiding our brain washed intelligence

Garage shut- I like to sing
Rev the car up & die w/me,
..like the start of HotTub Time Machine

This is to those Heath Ledgers trying to sleep better
The grief getters, scraping hearts on cheese shredders

favorites jab combinations.


this is what i like to see.. good shit brother Yz


thanks

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yea this was retarded man.. and i mean that in a stupid hella dope northwestern seattle slang term lol... non stop swag (hate that word) with a pretty nice dedicated scheme with some word usage i dont normally see. not that ive fed them but ive red a few of your pieces and you show mad emotion in an abstract way if that makes sense. definitely enjoyed it.. kudos