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Exis 12-31-2013 03:05 AM

Where We At
 
Ayo,

Fuck your loose leaf text shit
every time it's scribbled then posted
Ex the type to cripple opponents with some Bruce Lee leg kicks
or when a few knees head split he could drain more than energy
you should pray thoughts all heavenly before this noose meets neck bitch
I'll continue bruisin' these dead beats as my movements are brutal
I'm an out maneuverable chess piece
with lightnin' fast instincts I swooped in to check these
multiplyin'' ass inbreeds wantin' newbie approval
on my way to where beauty accepts me
as there the truest are set free
mark us down for that inclusion directly and the likes of you as excluded
I'm flyin' past the brink of ruthless at jet speed
and yet to reach the fringe of useless with technique
is a whole group of losers placed amongst the fuckin' stupid on Netcees
a spot where amusin' classed web geeks are a shoo-in for humor
here there's no número uno,
but a community where every guber behind a computers manure
and gets seen as Lucifers students from the view of my pupils
wantin' to be seeded atop, the freakin' cream of the crop
where Ex's music's a wet dream whether you mean to feel it or not.

e11even 12-31-2013 03:30 AM

i like this. keep it up. I'm sure ur just an alias like everyone else, but good shit either way.

Just Write 12-31-2013 10:07 AM

Ruthless texxt shit. Love it man. Right up my alley although i dont write too much like this because not too many people enjoy it. Keept it up though man, ill definitely look for more. And check out my tommy da god piece if u get a sec. Peace

Natural 01-02-2014 11:54 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Exis (Post 238988)
Ayo,

Fuck your loose leaf text shit
every time it's scribbled then posted
Ex the type to cripple opponents with some Bruce Lee leg kicks
or when a few knees head split he could drain more than energy
you should pray thoughts all heavenly before this noose meets neck bitch
I like the scheme. Dope. Good lil multi's


I'll continue bruisin' these dead beats as my movements are brutal
I'm an out maneuverable chess piece
with lightnin' fast instincts I swooped in to check these
multiplyin'' ass inbreeds wantin' newbie approval
on my way to where beauty accepts me
as there the truest are set free
mark us down for that inclusion directly and the likes of you as excluded

I'm flyin' past the brink of ruthless at jet speed
and yet to reach the fringe of useless with technique
↑I liked these lines.

is a whole group of losers placed amongst the fuckin' stupid on Netcees
a spot where amusin' classed web geeks are a shoo-in for humor
here there's no número uno,
but a community where every guber behind a computers manure
↑Lolol. Tight....but you kinda just dissed yourself too. You on here.

and gets seen as Lucifers students from the view of my pupils
wantin' to be seeded atop, the freakin' cream of the crop
where Ex's music's a wet dream whether you mean to feel it or not.

Anything I didn't bold and comment on was just ok...not necessarily bad
But not stand out.



Btw you said you hadn't read anything from me before except my "uh huh" piece and in that piece you said you wished I played with the schemes more.
If you care to look....search my drop "The Watching(horrorcore) and my drop "key". I believe they are both still on the second page of o.m. They both are more scheme intensive.
If not well fuck it


Stay up

jdeek 01-02-2014 12:10 PM

sick...liked the schemes and the different placement of the rhymes...kept it fresh throughout. i think i read some sick shit from you before...i'll keep my eyes open. good stuff

CopyPat 01-03-2014 05:50 AM

fuckin awesome. your style always reminds me of methodman because u almost always have 2 distinct seperate schemes going on. not only is it dope but its also pretty hard to do (properly) u pulled this one off almost flawlessly up until the last few bars

is a whole group of losers placed amongst the fuckin' stupid on Netcees
a spot where amusin' classed web geeks are a shoo-in for humor
here there's no número uno,
but a community where every guber behind a computers manure
and gets seen as Lucifers students from the view of my pupils
wantin' to be seeded atop, the freakin' cream of the crop
where Ex's music's a wet dream whether you mean to feel it or not.

the part where manure was begged for the "tep teep" sound/scheme, you know what i mean. starting with the manure part it kinda just all oozed out and felt like it lost all confinement like melting marshmallow lol. it kinda just kept going and going and felt like a run-on, fucked the flow a bit for me

wantin' to be seeded atop, the freakin' cream of the crop
where Ex's music's a wet dream whether you mean to feel it or not.

that final bar reedemed it though. and also successfully held 3! seperate schemes, impressive indeed.

Overall i really really liked this. i nitpicked the last part cause the rest was gold. great read

Exis 01-04-2014 06:28 AM

Thanks bro.

Split 01-04-2014 08:54 AM

really liked this. you been practicing? you pretty much didn't stumble on a single rhyme. stronger concepts than i remember.


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