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Wise Wiggles 02-09-2013 02:47 PM

Off to Neverland..
 
Today Tinkerbell's stinger fell & she couldn't fly
As my finger smelt like pussy pie
Which took me by surprise, it lingered well
Devil's music? Watch me sing to hell
Just a shadow of what's inside, I bleed the shell
Dripping blood like pixie dust, using wings to spell..
My purpose, flows precise, cursive. Use to fly perfect,
But you lost your faith- I'm deserted, god it's great
What a tragedy. Witness 2nd coming if you clap for me
Something's grabbing me around the waist
This the betrayal found in hate. You gave this clown his face
Count to eight, as Tiger Lily drowns w/haste
Last gurgle similar to sounds in rape.(now deflate)
The balloon is fucked, Too soon or what?
Wounded duck for the hounds to chase
You're My Boy, Blue- A track for the clouds to race
Outbreak. Hell's coming. 12 monkey's to spread virus
Evil drifts. See thru ships full'a dead pirates
Dress like it's a costume game, as I walk the plank
To splash or not to splash? I'll leave that option blank
Odd, insane.. Should I just lounge on my birthday?
Or dive.. & breathe life thru the mouth of a mermaid?
Someone give him a hand, it seems he lost his..
As the crocodile clock ticks, YOU BETTER YELL 'IM A CODFISH'
Always more than just one drink, Sup Tink?!
I pump ink- My heart is a pen
No light. But the darkness'll end
When he remembers.. & Peter starts to pretend..

Wise Wiggles 02-14-2013 08:46 AM

Awesome yo. This was probably some of the dopest shit I've ever read cuz it was sprinkled w Peter Pan references and shit nigga..

zygote 02-15-2013 11:00 PM

Good writing kept focus to the topic throughout. Only line that seemed off was the CODFISH line but then again not seen this cinema, but am familiar enough with it to understand and appreciate it.


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